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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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we spoke to the oaks at dawn when we left the path of return and ventured down into dark dreams past the pines that have hands and the cedars that whisper you were unsure of your journey you looked at my eye words to guide and said barefoot felt good but you couldn't see where I would lead you I took your hand then you were winged free in flight you had firefly eyes for moments and butterfly thighs that lifted you to my shoulders to be high woman tall at the pool of living rivers we bathed you fed the water mouths your warm from your finger tips they nursed they wanted more than you had you left them filled with your voice after, when we were in edge place between forward and stay forever you were my shirt with two buttons you were pale they were dark ended I undid you open with tremble and wore your wrap around me colors. ©Dark |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
You have a gentle inspire...this is soft, and very, very lovely... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
we spoke to the oaks at dawn when we left the path of return and ventured down into dark dreams past the pines that have hands and the cedars that whisper wondeful opening lines... to set the image in mind before the reader finds the story in the lines that follow... and that story..woven in half imaged phrases... is well told.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I took your hand then you were winged free in flight you had firefly eyes for moments and butterfly thighs that lifted you to my shoulders to be high woman tall at the pool of living rivers we bathed you fed the water mouths your warm from your finger tips they nursed they wanted more than you had you left them filled with your voice after, when we were in edge place between forward and stay forever you were my shirt with two buttons you were pale they were dark ended I undid you open with tremble and wore your wrap around me colors. ======================================= *shaking my head* your poetry wraps the readers in colors... the warm ones, the colors of the sun and fire. This poem has more cool analogy and images than even I know... you rock poet sir...add me to your groupie list. *L*  this one goes in my library as well.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS You have taken me there with your words. It's a beautiful place. You write like sun threads through trees. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Noir thank you ms N, you make me feel special with your replies Cpat, thank you sir, I appreciate your input on my humble offerings Janet Marie, you are far more to my words than I can mention, thank you so much. Martie, so pleased to have your eyes on my words..wear them with warm today..thank you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your images are so awesome I'm left speechless... this is excellent. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
you were winged free in flight you had firefly eyes for moments and butterfly thighs that lifted you to my shoulders to be high woman tall" Image after striking image...gosh I love to read your words. I always want to get lost in them. Hugs, ~Krista  Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dark~again and again... you take me to that warm place. Excellent. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, I envisioned a placid lake and waterfall reading this and the passion surrounding the whole canvas! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is breathtaking! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
a soft touch of ecstasy....to savor Lauren~ Step through the |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Suthern, thank you for the reivew and reply Smittykitty, please feel free to get lost in the words I offer..will look for you to lead you out. Enchantress, thank you sweet lady for your eyes Noah my friend thank you for the blessings |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
greeneyes..thank you Lauren, you are so saxy with your touches |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Impressive..truly impressive..  K |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'you were unsure of your journey you looked at my eye words to guide and said barefoot felt good but you couldn't see where I would lead you I took your hand then you were winged free in flight you had firefly eyes for moments and butterfly thighs that lifted you to my shoulders to be high woman tall' Again I will say how impressed I am with your poetry...this is a fantastic write...I truly enjoyed it... sp    I've been down this road forever, |
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blonddove1 New Member
since 2002-04-14
Posts 6Michigan |
As always Dark One your words paint the pictures of sensual feelings. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Severn; Thank you for your eyes and thoughts Snowpants, you bless me so .. Blondove...hugs my friend welcome to pip |
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