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Tim
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0 posted 2001-11-27 09:30 PM


I lost my dog, I loved that mutt,
he ran away, gate wasn't shut.
My dearest friend, his name was Jack,
a Labradour, with coat, jet black.
I missed that dog, I felt real sad,
I wanted him, to come home bad.
Searched high and low, searched far and wide,
I prayed to God, Jack had not died.
In local paper, reward was offered,
to locate Jack, big bucks were proffered.
One hundred dollars, for one to earn,
the only task, my dogs return.
Two long weeks passed, no sign of Jack,
I feared he'd never, be coming back,
Then telephone, a woman's voice,
"We have your dog," I felt rejoice.
I was so happy, could not believe,
to top it off, was Christmas Eve.
A perfect gift, a perfect day,
I let out, Hip Hip Hooray!
Ran to my car, in jubilation,
I drove 'cross town, was pure elation.
Four twelve south Elm, up to the door,
soon I'd have Jack, alone no more.
I knocked twice, door opened wide,
a mother young, asked me inside.
Across the room, beside a chair,
played little boy, and Jack was there.
"My husband left, we're nearly broke,
but now I'm happy," young mother spoke,
"With your reward, my dear son Mike,
will get his wish, a Christmas bike."
The mother said, "Mike bring Sam here,
his owner's come, it's time I fear,
for dog to go, so say good-bye,
no matter what, you're not to cry."
It was silent as a tomb,
as boy and dog walked across the room.
Down young boy's cheek, a single tear,
then all at once, things came quite clear,
"I'm afraid, there's some mistake,
this mixed breed cur's not Jack; a fake,"
I turned and walked towards the door,
dropped a C-note on the floor.
Went down the walk, not looking back,
farewell my friend, I'll miss you Jack.


[This message has been edited by Tim (edited 11-27-2001).]

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Eloise
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1 posted 2001-11-27 09:38 PM


Tim, this is a beautiful bitter sweet poem you have written.  I enjoyed this very much.
RosePetal
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2 posted 2001-11-27 09:43 PM


Oh, I would be sooo heartbroken If I lost my golden retriever! Good Write Tim!

[This message has been edited by RosePetal (edited 11-27-2001).]

Midnitesun
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3 posted 2001-11-27 09:50 PM


This really brought a tear to my eye. I understand what you did, and why. What a kind heart! Now, was this a 'for real' event, or just one helluva great poem? Either way, you brought both a tear and a smile to my face in one poem. BRAVO!!!
Tracey
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4 posted 2001-11-27 10:04 PM


This is so sweet. Very well written, and I adore the story. I can well see how someone would have left the dog, and dropped the money in that situation. It's a lovely Christmas story.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

peaches73533
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5 posted 2001-11-27 10:51 PM


A very compassionate and giving heart here.
Peaches

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6 posted 2001-11-28 12:25 PM


Sweet but sad...

God bless America, my home sweet home.

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