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Kicking Kim
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since 2001-04-16

Posts 426
Cloud Cucko Land!

0 posted 2001-07-07 12:53 PM

Black velvet curtains,
with a dusty tale to tell
dirty, dark and tattered
showing resemblences of hell.
Hanging low and heavy
creating cobwebs on the floor
lathargic, draping masks
which surely should tell more.

^*~*^

But wait, there may be reason,
why the curtains seem to fail,
for beneath the tattered blackness
hides a different tale.
A shiny pristine window,
always there but you never knew
that it held such fragrenced beauty
in its rosy, cosy view.

"Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression"

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

1 posted 2001-07-07 01:38 PM

Wow Kicking Kim this was a great piece and I really enjoyed the read I just loved your description of the curtain... The flow was great as well although there may have been a few places where it was off slightly... anyway hope to read more soon

Zu

"Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2001-07-07 01:39 PM

Forgot to put it in my library...

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-07 01:58 PM

...the discription was lovely

...i enjoyed it.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-07 10:10 PM

Beautifully written Kim.
The description was wonderful.

[This message has been edited by Spice (edited 07-07-2001).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-09 12:13 PM

I liked this one.....the description was wonderful, but i didn't find this to be as wonderful as most of your other pieces. I did enjoy it though.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Maynard
Junior Member

since 2001-06-29

Posts 12
IL

6 posted 2001-07-09 01:13 AM

this is an incredible write! i liked..

"I have nothing to tell you or sell you for the moment... but thank you for asking."

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

7 posted 2001-07-09 03:57 PM

Gosh, you are on a roll. I have enjoyed all of your poems today. Especially this one. I really did like it, especially the meaning I took from it.

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

8 posted 2001-07-15 05:53 PM

This is awesome, Kim. The descriptions here are outstanding. Wonderful imagery... I really enjoyed this! Beautiful work.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-07-31 11:18 PM

This is really good. The rhyme and flow is beautiful. Reminds me of a rhyming tale. Keep it up and keep sharing

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