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The Pain of The Trees--The Pain of Me
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The Pain of The Trees--The Pain of Me |
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Sunlit Soul Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 37Never Land |
Naked, withered, and peeling limbs Tear holes through lazy cotton clouds As winter drifts in a blue-gray monotone Through this sordid landscape... The silence carves hollows in me, The quiet broken only when Branches collide, shrieking as their gnarled skin Is ripped from them in violent strips. Dusk slips over the ashen sky Quickly pulling night between me And the shivering, softly crying forest I am now utterly alone For the acute pain of the trees Is the only thing keeping me from falling Away from myself. Oh God, please deliver me to the day Where spring breathes in lemon rays And where my soul doesn’t seem foreign, An invader unattached...separate from me... God, let the pain of the forest cease, Allow me and this frozen wood To exhale the dark and to simply be Alive once more. "Every man dies. Not every man lives." -Tim Robbins |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
'the acute pain of the trees is the only thing keeping me from falling away from myself'...loved this line. Intense imagery. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"The silence carves hollows in me..." Okay...grinning here, there must be some kind of "tree" synchronicity going on here. You are the FOURTH person within a week that I have found understands the language of trees. Just perfectly beautiful. And? We are thinking of starting a club...you are MOST welcome. and? WELCOME to the forum! gonna send this url to the other friends in our forest, okay? |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SunLitSoul~ Beautiful ! Beautiful ! Beautiful ! The imagery is outstanding. I can hear the pain of the tree branches - and feel the kinship of your emotions. We are all ready for the Spring ! Enjoyed the read so much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Reminds me of the nights I use to sleep in graveyards in or under the giant trees growing around the headstones... I always gained strength and comfort and heavy collection of thoughts from those nights... This was beautiful, Sunlit... I am proud to have you inducted into our tree circle.  Karen, we DO need to form a club... ~Beth |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
very awesome! well written.. much enjoyed reading..  hugs, g "...beyond the door, theres peace i'm sure...and i know there'll be no more tears in heaven..." clapton |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh God, please deliver me to the day Where spring breathes in lemon rays And where my soul doesn’t seem foreign, An invader unattached...separate from me... God, let the pain of the forest cease, Allow me and this frozen wood To exhale the dark and to simply be Alive once more. =================== intense expressions and amazing imagery.. very well done ... excellent evoke of emotions mixed with the elements of nature ... your writing style reminds me very much of another talented member here. Welcome to passions and Serenity's Tree Huggers Club Where the touch of the lover ends And the soul of the friend begins There's a need to be separate and a need to be one And a struggle neither wins |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Breathlessly wonderful really - that's what comes to mind. Nice to have you at passions..  K- it was not an unmusical sound: long, falling, half a sigh, like wind in the wires, or a train distancing. The Muse of Distance, A. Williamson |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Ah yes. . . the language of the trees. . . wonderful. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sunlit Soul Junior Member
since 2001-02-05
Posts 37Never Land |
JLR- why thank you! serenity- A tree club? I should look for more 'tree' writings, then! Thanks for reading and for wanting to admit me in!  Marge- Thank you for reading, you are a dearheart. Elizabeth- Can't say I've ever slept in a graveyard....I think that would spook me to death. Thanks for reading, fellow tree hugger! fallen rain- Thanks! Janet- Thank you greatly for the reply. I've had a couple of people tell me I have a similar style to a few people here...I shall have to find some of their work. Severn- Thank you! Sven- Thank you also! "Every man dies. Not every man lives." -Tim Robbins |
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