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Maybelline Eyes (Re-post because of "Candy Heart" By Brian Madden)
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Maybelline Eyes (Re-post because of "Candy Heart" By Brian Madden) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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*I posted this a long time ago and received very little replies, so I am sure that this poem will be new to many. I read an amazing poem "Candy Heart" By Brian Madden, and it inspired me to re-post this poem. Although mine only skims the surface of the pressures society puts on women and the lengths that women go to become like barbie, it is still related to the same issue as Brian's. I highly recommend that everyone read Brian's poem  While, I don't have the poetic talent that Brian possesses, I still felt that I had to post this poem, the words for this piece just poured out of me. I have made some revisions to this poem, so, it's a little different, so in a sense, it really is new. ~*MAYBELLINE EYES*~ Maybelline eyes and Cover Girl lips, blushed sunken cheekbones and barely-there hips french manicured fingernails with painted red toes, Victoria's Secret is a secret indeed, hiding beneath the latest Gucci clothes Rembrandt bleached, dazzling white teeth and Clairol blonde hair from a box, Revlon lashes, curled and coated and Pantene hairsprayed locks, Coco Chanel and Oscar de la Renta, lavishly sprayed on your wrists, Only the best from Paris, such beautiful expensive scents, with satin padded push-up bras and tummy slimming undergarments, then there's Estee Lauder face lift cream, for, it's "your best face in a minute," new Freshlook Colourblend contacts, from dull brown to blue in an instant, and tinted Max Factor moisturizer, with Yves Saint Laurent concealor too, longing to be like a supermodel, selling your soul to be anyone but you You'll surely be the envy of women, and the talk among many men, with that long, flowing blonde hair and those flirty baby blue eyes, and yet, the girl that stares back from the mirror is not your friend, for, Elizabeth Arden skin is but a thin disguise; still, every day you wear your mask to the world, creating full, soft pouty lips just like Claudia Schiffer's, molding a perfect face just like that of Cindy Crawford, and starving yourself for a manequin body to be like Christy Turlington too, you've become quite the illusionist, I must say, but not a good enough magician to conceal the emptiness in you *By Melissa Honeybee* [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-15-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Melissa,...WoW!!! I love this. Absolutely,..it holds such a huge message. The emptiness part at the end just tells it all. So well done. I have read Brian's poem and all the replies which helped me to better understand his deeply poetic mind. He's something else 'eh? Too damn good. This is awesome, I didn't see it before...but am glad that I have now. Thank you for the read...the much needed message to the world. Take care. *Peace. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I remember this Melissa! Well done again, and so true...but I repeat myself. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Melissa~ I haven't read this before, I'm glad you posted it again! It's great! So sad that women feel the need to hide under all that crap....yea, I wear some make-up, but I'd never hide my big beautiful brown eyes.... I'm teaching my girls that Barbie is a lie! (Of course they are blonde and have big blue eyes)Go figure (LOL) -SEA |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Well, I haven't read Brian's yet, (kinda outa this board for a while) and kinda glad I haven't so I see this on it's merit alone. Absolutely wonderful piece, I wish all would read it. jwesley Okay, I just read Brian's, and shoot yourself in the foot if you want but I think this is every bit as good and in way's even better than Brians. I found his a lot more abstract, yours more in tune with real life. Yet, they are both great in their own way while addressing a similar matter. I prefer yours of the two. jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 06-15-2000).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow! Thank you so much to everyone for liking this piece This is a very serious matter to me, and I hope that more people read my poem or Brian's.Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Melissa, you have done a fantstic job with this... and you speak with much truth and wisdom, Im sorry you struggle personally with this. Our own self image is sometimes very different from what others see in us. It does not matter what others see in us IF we are not secure in what we see in ourselves. And it does not help to have so many plastic and unattainable examples of how society and the fashion world decides how we are suppose to look... they force it off on us as it makes big bucks for them. you've done a great job on this poem take care of yourself... see the beauty in you and your poetry jm |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Janet~ Thank you, you are so sweet and very supportive. I knew that I could count on you to read and reply to my poem. I agree completely with what you are saying, sadly, it's true, especially with teenage girls. I am sure that if you wrote a poem related or about this topic, your poem would be very creative, insightful and poignant. Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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ashley cain Junior Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 30Texas |
this is a great message that "the most beautiful woman" is certainly capable of emptiness |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
"Maybe she is born with it maybe its Maybelline" Your poem has exposed the dark irony of that ad slogan. creating full, soft pouty lips just like Claudia Schiffer's, molding a perfect face just like that of Cindy Crawford, and starving yourself for a manequin body to be like Christy Turlington too, you've become quite the illusionist, I must say, but not a good enough magician to conceal the emptiness in you The last two lines sent shivers down my spine. True beauty and happiness does lie on the inside, no matter what the adverts say. Melissa a powerful poem. I am so glad you reposted this, This is an excellent poem from a truely talented poet. To the top. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso "We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde ----- |
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