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Erin
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0 posted 2000-08-17 07:57 PM



Ok i wrote a poem....but i dont really think it is a poem...its just a bunch of love is this and love is that...if anyone can add to it please do so...i would like to see how it turns out...i seen this in another forum and it turned out pretty good...


Love is: as sweet as wine.
Love is: hoping you will always be mine.

Love is: a very gentle touch.
Love is: showing that I love you so much.

Love is: always going strong.
Love is: something that should never go wrong.

Love is: you holding the key to my heart.
Love is: keeping us together and not apart.

Love is: believing that it is real.
Love is: something that you feel.

Love is: something that brightens up your day.
Love is: not just a 4 letter word you say.

Love is: not something that falls from the sky.
Love is: not something that makes you want to cry.


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~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~



[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 08-17-2000).]

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DancinQueen
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1 posted 2000-08-17 11:32 PM


OH this was too a poem! It was really cute. I liked the way you formatted it. It was really good. Keep up the great work babe!

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-08-17 11:41 PM


Of course this is poetry!  I can't really think of anything to add right now, but i wanted to let you know I loved it
Erin
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3 posted 2000-08-18 01:34 AM


DQ~~~i didnt really think that this would be a poem...but the more i read it the more it sounds like one...but i think that it has to much LOVE IS...you know what i mean???

lakewalker~~~well know that you said "right now" i am expecting you to add to it...LOL

thanks for the replies you guys...i really appreciate them!!!


~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


Jeremy Halstead
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4 posted 2000-08-18 03:27 AM


kewl idea....hows about....

Love is:  the unreturnable unselfishness
Love is:  the care thus shown to thruth a wish.

"Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade."

TAP2
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5 posted 2000-08-18 11:45 AM


Erin,
First off, nice to see that some of the epople that were here when I first started posting are still here. A lot of new talent has joined us since I've been gone.

Secondly, this is a lovely depiction and description of love and waht it can be and mean. Here's my attempt at adding to this work of art:

Love is: two hearts beating as one
Love is: as sure as the rising and setting sun

Love is: the crashing torrents of a waterfall
Love is: the mercy and hope that conquers all

Hope these are good enough to beworthy.

Thomas A. Plemmons

Lakewalker
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6 posted 2000-08-18 12:02 PM


ERIN, I'm never going to be able to top the the talent you've shown and those who have already added (so I'm not gonna add any).  But, I think having "Love is:" at the beginning of each line adds a good repition and keeps the focus on your point.  I'd keep it the way it is
Salooma
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7 posted 2000-08-18 12:57 PM


this was great Erin....poetry indeed!
Love is: the look I see in your eyes.
Love is: our feelings in disguise.

sorry this poem just makes you wanna keep going....but sorry if mine are a little bad.

salooma

Erin
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8 posted 2000-08-18 01:10 PM


jeremy, salooma and tap~~~those are all perfect...yours is not bad at all salooma...thanks for helping!!!

lakewalker~~~who cares...im not that good...i just write words down some make sense and some dont...but your just as good...

~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~


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