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Courage Deserted Me Then...
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Courage Deserted Me Then... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Courage Deserted Me Then ... So many thoughts I'd wanted to share, So many feelings I kept hidden inside, They stayed secrets - rejection feared, Not wanting to hurt my foolish pride. I knew not how to express my love, Or how to show the insides of my heart, I feared that you would push and shove, Asking me to go away, tearing me apart. I always wanted to hold you close, and lose myself deep in your eyes, Wanted to sing a song I composed, To make you believe I spoke no lies. I wanted to see a smiling happy you, And share your times of gladness, Wanted to be there to protect you, To comfort you through your sadness. All said but there was nothing I did, Feeling a total lack of courage, Looking back this day, I feel stupid - Nothing left but moral outrage! But my love for you remains eternal, My yearning for you exists as always; To find light at the end of the tunnel, I hope, in this life's lonesome highway. ~ [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Elilas Junior Member
since 2000-03-15
Posts 20The Dalles, Oregon, USA |
this is a good pome you seem vary passionet about the subject witch is always for the best. Steven |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
oh wow this is a really good poem. i give you two thumbs up. do you mind if i copy it?? ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Steven, Erin Thank you you two... very much... for reading and responding... Erin, you may copy it if you would like, I won't mind... regards, sudhir |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow great poem and i just loved the title! that seems like a person you really care about and i hope everything works out with you. thanks for sharing this! salooma |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Very beautiful, with a mysterious aura around it. Just great! *~Meredith~* [This message has been edited by LyricFetish (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Such powerful emotions in this wonderful verse Sudhir ... and the closing is so beautifully stated: "To find light at the end of the tunnel, I hope, in this life's lonesome highway." Oh, it's so lovely to have you here again ... please do keep visiting! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
It is indeed nice to have you visit! Exellent work here, a tinge of sadness, but a tinge of hope too...I enjoyed!  *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Salooma, and thanks for reading this... Meredith, "aura" is a fine word... Thanks Kit, Thanks for reading and I will drop by once in a while... I enjoy it here amongst real teen talents... Krista, I am glad that you enjoyed this one... regards to all, sudhir |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow that was impressive! Very good. keep it up Bel |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks Isabel.... a lot regards, sudhir |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Sudhir, Ive been gone for awhile and so I almost missed this one. I really can relate to this one because I am allways the shy nice guy who is afraid to act on his feelings. Very well expressed indeed. Jason  Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jason, Thanks for reading... regards, sudhir |
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