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The Messenger.....................................#1
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The Messenger.....................................#1 |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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"My Lord", the Queen said, "by your leave I've written down a rhyme And would be proud for you to comment on, should you have time. I've woven quite a tapestry of images that sing A message that I feel would be befitting for a king." "A rhyme?", the King said. "Lady, there is nothing I hate worse Than silly little couplets forced together into verse! Pure prose alone is strong enough to make a message clear And not this childish ditty that you dare to offer here." Just then the castle doors sprung wide and, entering from the night, A young man rushed, quite out of breath with features full of fright. "My King!", he cried. "The armies of our foes are on the march! They're pillaging the villages with saber, lance and torch." "Our legions need men and supplies. Please do not hesitate Or, by this time tomorrow, they'll be at the castle gate!" The King reacted quickly. Reinforcements were dispatched And, by the eve, the tide had turned...the danger met and matched. That evening in the royal bed, the Queen quite sweetly, said "That boy who warned us of the fight-was his hair blond...or red?" "What's this?", replied the King. "What nonsense do I hear from you?" "That boy", she said, "who came today. Were his eyes brown...or blue?" "Was his body big and strong...or was it rather small? Were his features pale or sunburned? Did you find him short or tall? Did you spy rings on his fingers or a chain around his neck? When he moved, did he bend down a bit or did he stand erect?" "My Queen, you've truly gone insane to ask such foolish things. I care not if he had ORANGE eyes...or if he wore TEN rings! I care not how he walked...care not what color horse he mounted! The boy held no signifigance - the message was what counted!" "My lord", the Queen said, "by your leave, I've written down a rhyme And would be proud for you to comment on, should you have time......" The King smiled. In his eye, a humorous twinkle could be seen. He said, "I am a lucky man to have such a wonderous Queen." |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Well written there Sir The king I gather could it perhaps .. .. ... ...... Well I only guess and be onguard for # 2 Well done there Sir, yes, so have you I also like the arrow on the spanned bow Ready to read what was the queen's poem The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ What a majestic twisting rhyme. You do it good ... everytime.  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
The message is what is important, not the form of delivery! Great writing, Balladeer! I wish I had written something like this!  Denise |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Amazing you are in your poetry, this was intriguing. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderfully done. We can always count on you to put a great message in your poetry! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A great tale bearing a wonderful message... as always. *S* Well done, Balladeer! |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Oh how I love poetry with a message as important as this one. When shall we expect number 2? Waiting with a n t i c i p a t i o n. Chinese fortune cookie say: There are many unexpected & thrilling surprises in store for you. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Simply wonderful 'Deer ! 'S' How your talent shines ..... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you all. This was written at a time we were have many discussions concerning the differences between free verse and rhymed poetry. Glad you enjoyed |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Well I enjoyed it as I always do. Now write on procrastinating. And you know what I mean. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This was wonderful. I sure do like a poet who can rhyme....or not! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
A truer poet never seen Than he who write for his dear queen In words of rhyme and melody Displayed for all the world to see |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Enjoyed, as always, your whimsical rhyme. ~ Claire |
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