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"My Lord", the Queen said, "by your leave I've written down a rhyme
And would be proud for you to comment on, should you have time.
I've woven quite a tapestry of images that sing
A message that I feel would be befitting for a king."

"A rhyme?", the King said. "Lady, there is nothing I hate worse
Than silly little couplets forced together into verse!
Pure prose alone is strong enough to make a message clear
And not this childish ditty that you dare to offer here."

Just then the castle doors sprung wide and, entering from the night,
A young man rushed, quite out of breath with features full of fright.
"My King!", he cried. "The armies of our foes are on the march!
They're pillaging the villages with saber, lance and torch."

"Our legions need men and supplies. Please do not hesitate
Or, by this time tomorrow, they'll be at the castle gate!"
The King reacted quickly. Reinforcements were dispatched
And, by the eve, the tide had turned...the danger met and matched.

That evening in the royal bed, the Queen quite sweetly, said
"That boy who warned us of the fight-was his hair blond...or red?"
"What's this?", replied the King. "What nonsense do I hear from you?"
"That boy", she said, "who came today. Were his eyes brown...or blue?"

"Was his body big and strong...or was it rather small?
Were his features pale or sunburned? Did you find him short or tall?
Did you spy rings on his fingers or a chain around his neck?
When he moved, did he bend down a bit or did he stand erect?"

"My Queen, you've truly gone insane to ask such foolish things.
I care not if he had ORANGE eyes...or if he wore TEN rings!
I care not how he walked...care not what color horse he mounted!
The boy held no signifigance - the message was what counted!"

"My lord", the Queen said, "by your leave, I've written down a rhyme
And would be proud for you to comment on, should you have time......"
The King smiled. In his eye, a humorous twinkle could be seen.
He said, "I am a lucky man to have such a wonderous Queen."

© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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Well written there Sir
The king I gather could it perhaps .. .. ... ......
Well I only guess and be onguard for # 2
Well done there Sir, yes, so have you
I also like the arrow on the spanned bow
Ready to read what was the queen's poem

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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Balladeer~
What a majestic twisting rhyme.
You do it good ... everytime.  
~*Marge*~


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The message is what is important, not the form of delivery! Great writing, Balladeer!
I wish I had written something like this!  

Denise
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Amazing you are in your poetry, this was intriguing.
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Wonderfully done. We can always count on you to put a great message in your poetry!  
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A great tale bearing a wonderful message... as always. *S* Well done, Balladeer!
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Oh how I love poetry with a message as important as this one.  When shall we expect number 2?  Waiting with
      a n t i c i p a t i o n.  

 Chinese fortune cookie say:
There are many unexpected & thrilling surprises in store for you.
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Simply wonderful 'Deer !   'S'
How your talent shines .....
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Thank you all. This was written at a time we were have many discussions concerning the differences between free verse and rhymed poetry. Glad you enjoyed  
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Balladeer,
Well I enjoyed it as I always do. Now write on procrastinating. And you know what I mean.
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This was wonderful.  I sure do like a poet who can rhyme....or not!
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A truer poet never seen
Than he who write for his dear queen
In words of rhyme and melody
Displayed for all the world to see  
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Enjoyed, as always, your whimsical rhyme.

~ Claire
 
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