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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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First Hand Witness Can you see the colored beauty in the lost aching thorns bowing at your cornered feet? Can you feel the glowing sunlight bounce through their rifling pain piercing your skin with vengeance? Can you envision delightful a course through forest land fielding needles embedded? Your such a brave divine guest unto you the stage set blindly a wanderers curse. First hand witness of life's turmoil see stems bind and struggle keeping natures wondrous flow. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Gloria!  Very nice! Denise |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
L D this has a wonderful mysterious feel to it. I've read it a couple of times and it gets BETTER and BETTER. I think it's one of my favourites from you. Great Jon [This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 06-05-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Denise: Thank You very much. Jon: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
LostDreamer, Like Jon, I have read it several times, some mystery there, like it lots. I like a good mystery. Good job. marcy |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Alle': Thank you, glad you enjoyed. Now as I read the replies, and ponder a personal comment by a friend, it's seems this poem is very mysterious and I'd have to agree. It's one of those that just came to me, it started with the aching thorn. Now I am beginning to think this was a subliminal message coming through me...LOL I know I sound crazy, but now that everyone is commenting like this it's made me think and I realized that I listened to a song by Poison called Every Rose Has It's Thorns, and as I read this poem over today that is all I can think of is that song. Really weird and freaky if you ask me, but hey now you all know your right, it's very mysterious. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW. I loved this poem, it is not often that someone focuses on the dark side of beauty which it what I read from the poem. Amazing images, really enjoying this poem. First Hand Witness Can you see the colored beauty in the lost aching thorns bowing at your cornered feet? Can you feel the glowing sunlight bounce through their rifling pain piercing your skin with vengeance? First hand witness of life's turmoil see stems bind and struggle keeping natures wondrous flow. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
good one LD i wrote one a while back called THORN-BIT, about the harsh side of beauty--this made me remember it..maybe i'll post it one day and we can match up! lol  dg "A Poet's life is on written page; a scenario to take the stage--watch..." dgvarner |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Brian: Wow, thank you very much I'm glad you are enjoying it. dgvarner: Thank you for reading and you nice reply, I would love to read yours when you decide to post it. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Wow. This was truly beautiful, and I agree...very mysterious. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Not only mysterious, suspenseful!! I've never really gotten that feeling from poetry before! Kudos to your creative abilities, Dreamer  Great work!!!Little Spyro T. Dragon ____________________________________________________________ Uh...speaking of kudos...you wouldn't mind getting me the chocolate chip one with the M&M's, would you? [This message has been edited by Little_Spyro (edited 06-07-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Temptress: Thank You very much. Little_Spryo: You've left me speechless, what an honor it is for you to get so much out of one of my poems. Thank you from the depths of my heart. Kudos with chocolate chips and M&M's are on order. |
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kelieth Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 314Normal IL - USA |
Wonderful piece of work so true. Another way I enjoy reading from you. Exellent work Kevin "Anything is possible with patience, time is the tool use it to reach your goals." |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Words come to life under your pen! Brilliant and mysterious, I must say. *S* Gimme moore!! If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™ |
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