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The Blind Man and the Raven
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The Blind Man and the Raven |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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 Uploaded with ImageShack.us God's love he shunned; he refused, He only loved things he could see. Though blind he saw a magical lake, A Falcon's shadow, wild and free. Never touching the lake, just skimmed, Blind Man friended Falcon of the lake. When Blind Man died the Falcon plunged To die on lake's sky reflected fake. �July 12, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ [This message has been edited by Balladeer (09-17-2012 12:18 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hmmmm...I'm going to give this more thought before I come back and respond after a second read, for it is worthy. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Okay, Karilea, see you later . . . ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
To die on lake's sky reflected fake. I really like this line. The entire poem is wonderfully unique Not your usual fare Enjoyed much Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, Lori. Sometimes I go off the reservation. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Brilliant write, Jerry. Good to see you on a different venue. You have a very special talent to write exactly what you see, real or imagined. Enjoyed the read, buddy. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
You make my day when you compliment me in such a way, JL, and I thank you very much. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Jerry, this felt like a Native American elder telling a legend to a younger listener... Is the title intentional or...? -MVS You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
No, Mark, the title was, "The Blind Man and the Raven." I see that the didn't remove the poem, so I'll put the correct title back up. Thank for stopping by. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Nice poem but a raven and a hawk are two different birds. anyway, I enjoyed it! Kat >^..^< |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, that was a typo, Kat. Thank you for pointing it out. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Such is the price of loyalty... And one not noted until there's no choice but to pay. I get the feeling I could read this over and over and find something new to ponder in it each time. Deliciously dark. Much enjoyed. Michael |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, Michael. We both covered the darkness today. Appreciate you stopping by. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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