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Man in the Moon Outed
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Man in the Moon Outed |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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the unusual seems to want tender beneath a full moon breakable a careful cloud scuttles across its anxious angels flying hushed tonight when the time is compliant they will bring their fragile deposit careful kisses upon my clever before they leave they take them back blushing the moon tames the clouds and shines naughtily a tear in the corner of his precious man in the moon has removed himself from the closet telling the stars curious and cleverly that he waits for the cow to jump over the moon ©August 27, 2012 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (09-17-2012 08:35 AM).] |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Nice new take on an old nursery rhyme, enjoyed . Kat >^..^< |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, Kat, I get a little weird sometimes, and this is one of those times. Thank you very much for your comments. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I like your kind of weird then my friend. This is delightful. Enjoyed much! Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Lori, Much appreciated. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
Oh yes...I like this one a lot...it touches the fantasy in me...well done, my friend...*BIG HUGS* *may our dreams ever be magical* |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I thank you, Karen, for being here and commenting. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"man in the moon has removed himself from the closet telling the stars curious and cleverly that he waits for the cow to jump over the moon" If there really can be classic poetry this is one. Nice write, Jerry. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
High praise, JL, and I thank you profusely. Really, thank you, man. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
It's good to see your lighter side, quite refreshing, actually. Nicely done, Jer. Michael |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Haha Yeah, I don't live in the dark and gloom all the time, Michael. Appreciate the read and comments. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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