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Gina's Song
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Gina's Song |
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Kethry D Member
since 2010-04-12
Posts 64Australia |
When all the words she needs to say are said And all those things that seal goodbye are done A clock that’s ticking slowly in her head Will signal new day’s dawn and rising sun It’s then she’ll take the shroud of darkest night And put on colours bathed in morning light It’s then she’ll rise to greet this warming sun And tell herself it’s over - it is done She’ll take up all the shredded pain he gave And make a dress with victory sewn in seams Then she’ll cast off the dirt from her old grave Not be afraid to love or share her dreams She’ll dance flamenco to a driving beat And feel her body rise to passion’s heat She’ll fling her strength into this new affray And be prepared for all that comes her way The world has done its worst and now she’s free She’s beaten all the odds and come out strong She hums an ancient song of victory And knows that nothing now will stop her song A poet must leave traces of his passing not proof. Rene Char |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Kethry, I have read this several times and I like the phoenix feel of it. Actually I came to two different views of her experience which made it so interesting. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And make a dress with victory sewn in seams Not just terrific... triumphant!!! May her melody grow ever stronger... this is fantastic! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
She’ll take up all the shredded pain he gave And make a dress with victory sewn in seams Then she’ll cast off the dirt from her old grave Not be afraid to love or share her dreams She’ll dance flamenco to a driving beat And feel her body rise to passion’s heat She’ll fling her strength into this new affray And be prepared for all that comes her way ~*~ Brava!  |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Freedom is a song at your feet... enjoy the dance. I particularly liked that third stanza. Well done. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
'And make a dress with victory sewn in seams' ...what a cool phrase...nicely done |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
the third stanza seems to be eveyone's favorite not surprisingly, it's mine too! you have done a superb job! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dazzling poetry~ Beautifully said and done, fair lady~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
nothing like victory poetry to make one applaud. I applaud you, Keth  She'll take up all the shredded pain he gave And make a dress with victory sewn in seams Now THAT'S poetry! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Original and well crafted, Kethry. Gives one a feeling of immortality. Ida |
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Lamar Cole Member
since 2009-05-01
Posts 274 |
Very uplifting poem. |
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Kethry D Member
since 2010-04-12
Posts 64Australia |
Thanks everyone. I think I've been away from all this positive re-inforcement for too long. I appreciate all the kind words. Keth A poet must leave traces of his passing not proof. |
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