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Hospital Love |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
Him I met this girl at the hospital last night She was a cleaner girl, but that was alright I was waiting to get myself stitched up And I saw her walking, so I looked up She gave me a smile, and a tiny wave My heart stopped, I don’t know how I behaved She was going further and farther away, So I asked her what was her name She stopped and looked at me again I wondered if she’d heard what I’d said Then a sweet voice came out from her lips “Amanda.” they said, the sweetness hits She then walked away, smile on her face Golden hair over her eyes, feet kept pace With my racing heart, it just wouldn’t slow down So she swept the floor beneath my feet’s ground Her movements quick, her hands knew the way She did her job knowing I watched her, wishing she’d stay I grabbed her hand; she stopped and froze, not pulling away I didn’t know what to say, only that I wished for her everyday She turned around and asked me who I might be I told her I was no one without one such as she As I said this to her, I looked into her hazel eyes They were full of the emotions of shock and surprise She stood there still, her hand in mine I took it and kissed it, soft and fine Seeing the look in her eyes I knew I’d found her She looked into mine she knew it too, I was sure I let go of her hand and so did she, but I kept the moment I want to see her again but how to I don’t know, I don’t She walked off to do her job, walking she looked back They called me in and she was out of sight, sad fact I came out, fix but not ready to leave just yet She walked out right when I had hoped she was set Her job was done, nothing left for her to do So before I went I kissed her, it was magic we both knew Her Last night I worked really late I walked past and stood to wait And gave him a wave a smile slight As I walked off to do my duties that night Then he called out for me, a strange thing Not knowing what to do, I found myself stalling I remained silent; he had asked me my name I found a voice, but not one that I had ever contained It said one thing I never thought that it would word “Amanda.” said I, the only sound from me heard Then I walked away, a fool’s smile on my face I turned to do my job; my heart never before had raced I came nearer to him again, my job I had to do He was watching me, something we were aware of and knew Then he did it, he grabbed my working hand My back still to him, I knew not of his plan He told me he wished for me everyday So I turned around and told him what I had to say I asked him who he was, who could he be? He told me he was nothing without me Then I knew, all from what he did do He kissed my hand paler than usual, so I looked into his eyes as he looked into mine We both knew, we had reached into something divine We let go and he was wheeled away, I went too I looked back for the final moment, he did too I really worked quickly wanting to see him go I ran out in the hallways running fast just so He was better when he came out the room now I walked in on his leave, the time right, somehow He came to me and took my waist with his hand And we kissed under no conscience plan "Love is the irresistible desire to be irresistibly desired." Mark Twain |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
I liked this alot... just work on the rhythym and flow a bit. good write. Welcome to Pip! toodles!, Pen |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
long but amazing i loved thos a lot hope to read more soon... hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
loved the name amanda, that's my imaginary character's name as well. i love it b/c it means must be loved or worthy of love. how special for those with that name huh? well i think that the name was perfect for the story. which i by the way have fallen in love with. -Red "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
wow it just worked so well and i liked how you had both sides of the story both the male and female it was like ying and yang it was a perfect job |
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