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On A Tiny Planet
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On A Tiny Planet |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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On A Tiny Planet Birds crisscross down there; bird shapes of no specie at all, backlit by the water glare. The sky is twin shells, their edges all akiss, and the noisy one below no bluer than above. Looking west this bluff is a tiny planet, too small to hold the ache of a crowd; today I need a tiny planet for a tiny time to be alone on, its curves all rounding down to sky and the limits defined, one bluff with green and blue and birds, always birds for the motion of them. It is so much easier than being alone on a big one. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm liking this poem so much I hope I'm the first to respond. While we were criss-crossing the country miles this last weekend to visit the various cemeteries, and sitting in the back seat, as the front seats were relegated to the son [driver] and mother, I was watching the countryside, and there were several times where I saw the shadow of medium and larger birds' bodies upon the ground...in flight...and wondered about the poets who might write of birds...and nature...and noticing the little things that make us feel better when we get a chance to read what we didn't have time to think about. So thank God, you're a poet. Thank you God, for this poet. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...I am reminded of "The Little Prince" sitting on his tiny planet...do you know that story? Loved this line, "The sky is twin shells, their edges all akiss," Lovely imagery, my friend...with a feeling of sad yet seeing so much beauty.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I was sitting here nodding in agreement |
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picturegramic Member
since 2006-05-16
Posts 112 |
Nicely done. An enjoyable read looking thru your eyes! Thanks for sharing. picturegramic :) |
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Tom Zart Senior Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 682 |
Great poem I wish it were one of mine. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Loved, needed (as you know, seeing that you read and responded to Office Politicians) and devoured your poem - hope I have left some of it for everyone else to read! I think I must go and find myself a tiny time in a tiny planet in my indigenous forest garden before I go into the office war zone this morning. Thanks for the idea! I enjoyed everyone's responses before me and particularly Sunshine's - and Martie - that was exactly what I thought too about The Little Prince's tiny planet - thinking right now of the days that he was sad, when he would have to keep moving his chair to keep seeing the sunset. - Owl |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
"I need a tiny planet for a tiny time to be alone on," Oh Yes! I think we can all use "a tiny planet to be alone on" Will you rent it out by the day or week? Would love to go there. martyjo |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
sounds like Memorial Day at the New Jersey Shore... marvelous write as always... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
is a tiny planet, too small to hold the ache of a crowd; today I need a tiny planet for a tiny time to be alone on, It was hard for me to decide which lines to focus on... these or the last two. *S* For woven with imagery that's pure art, they define the need for escape from a world that's overwhelming... and sometimes overwhelmingly empty. As Sunshine said... Thank God for this poet, for his pen... and for a tiny planet that's likely to get very crowded as we all vie to visit. *G* Superb write!!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"today I need a tiny planet for a tiny time to be alone on" ~ I like how you put that, and I understand the sentiments ~ for I too have had moments like that. Here's my small planet that I'm willing to share with you ~ at different times!   Introspective and contemplative ~ and beautifully scribed! Linda |
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Bodger Senior Member
since 2005-06-12
Posts 1260Tolerance for a short time |
Sounds like the Amazon And we destroy everything ourselves, then tell others "we know best" and we are right, no one has destroyed for so long or in some much depth than us Dave |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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StevenS Senior Member
since 2005-09-21
Posts 945L. A. (Lower Alabama) |
Enjoyed Ratleader! :-) May your planet be to your liking. :-) |
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