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Surprise at Wintry Carwash
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Surprise at Wintry Carwash |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
“Too tired to pen tonight,” gelid thought glazed, linking the spray of wash an hour back. Busy day immersed in rush and of salt-mud flushed Down rounded crystal cavernous walls of car wash. Ice pebbles lined bristles brush but Removed with nitpicking gloves so that Not a scratch would be harmfully rubbed Into cars lustrous coat of black. A frozen floor of froth and icy foam displayed beneath harried feet. As he hosed, icy walls instantly rolled warmly cold, Into blocks receipt. Inside, I beheld the pace of crystal over metal spread Until engrossed by flooded windshield and its water flows. From progression of subtle mounting rows, thick prisms arose, Lending me new lights from which to see, open new sights to pen. [This message has been edited by Sadelite (02-01-2004 04:37 AM).] |
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misao Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 50 |
Incredible  Keep up the excellent work!  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
misao, I'm glad you liked it. Sometimes, just have to write, but have to catch an image to write about. The images have been flying pretty fast lately-I was afraid I couldn't catch any... Thank you for your kindness in reply. ~Sadelite~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (giggles) I looovvvveee car washes, I love those Diamond Shamrock ones where they give you soap in yellow and pink and blue colors and then wax it all over the windows to make the windshields look all pastel! (kiss on cheek) Hehehe, you wear a Turtle Wax smile as our friend poet, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sadelite, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Fabulous images with a gritty feel. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Noah, Thank you for sudsing pastels upon me! I've never seen those type before, but they sound like a real hoot! Wouldn't they be pretty in frozen state? Thank you for this picture and response! You're very sweet. Sadlite |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Kethry, Thank you for your compliment and perception. I hadn't intended a gritty image, but it is one from which I wrote. You perceived it well. Sadelite |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I never doubted it... but you've just proved a poet's inspiration comes from anywhere and everywhere. *S* Beautiful work! *S* |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
suthern, It's true isn't it? When ya think all is blank, something pops up, asking to found. Thank you so much for your reflective comment. Sadelite |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A unique look at something so mundane. Very good! Grover. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
funny where we find our inspiration...nice work |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Grover, Mundane... that's an interesting word. Out of curiosity, I wonder what words we could make if we scrambled its letters up. Thank you for your kind response, Grover. ~Sadelite~ passing shadows, Yep! See what happens out of desperation to keep writing something every day or two. Before I know it i'll be writing about baby bibs or coke bottles! Thanks for your continued reading, p.s. ~Sadelite |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Inside, I beheld the pace of crystal over metal spread Until engrossed by flooded windshield and its water flows. From progression of subtle mounting rows, thick prisms arose, Lending me new lights from which to see, open new sights to pen." This is my favorite part. You're so good at painting....like I've said before. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Wow, I can only imagine how good you write when your not tired? The last time I took my car to the carwash, they left the window down, and broke my antenna...  Enjoyed this Sadelite! Have an enjoyable rest of the weekend.  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
iliana, As to your comment, I hope I don't paint "too much of the picture". It's a fine line. Take care... ~Sadelite~ Richy You're too kind! Thank you for your thoughtful comments. ~Sadelite~ |
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