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Makin' Time - Response to Toe's Telepathic Timex
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Makin' Time - Response to Toe's Telepathic Timex |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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Makin' Time Listen up, I'll tell the rest of Toerag's little tale He tells it well, but left out just a bit of the detail I'd hate to leave you in the dark, 'bout what went on that day We all can learn a lesson from the games Toe likes to play Toe's telephatic Timex watch is pretty slick indeed But it's quite clear he's told his tale with intent to mislead So, Toe, I hope you'll understand if I elaborate And tell your friends the painful truth about your awful fate You see, my friends, our Toe is smooth, but not as smooth as she And though his lines are pretty good, they bring no guarantee Now Toe, he thought this girl another mountain he could climb Instead, she slapped his second hand while he was makin' time No doubt, this 'foxy blonde' was simply more than Toe could bare She dumped her drink into his lap and left him sitting there Toe sat in shock and disbelief not knowing what went wrong Was it too much to ask to simply see her in her thong? Toe ripped the watch from 'round his wrist and threw it 'cross the bar That piece of junk was worthless - hadn't gotten him too far He ordered up another drink and sat there all alone "I'll never try that line again", he mumbled with a groan The moral of this story, friends, is quite a simple one Just savor every moment, 'cause"time flies when you're gettin' none" ~vlraynes I'm sure you've probably all seen the poem that inspired this, but just in case you haven't, here's the link.  /pip/Forum76/HTML/000125.html "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-17-2002 10:21 PM).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh YEAH!!!! And that is the other side of the story!! Well done, girlfriend!!! ~~S~~ Pen how you truly feel... it is a safety-valve for the soul! [This message has been edited by Sunnyone (12-17-2002 05:22 PM).] |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
too funny |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
heh, this is a great follow up, I really enjoyed the read Andrew |
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Music Maker Member
since 2002-07-07
Posts 152THE ORIGINAL !!!! |
Vicky, What a superb and quickly written response to Toe's 'effort'. I really feel that both he and Balladeer have met their match in you. Might I respectfully suggest that the pair of them, should become a 'Threesome' with yourself as the 'Third Member'- the presence of a lady amid the thrust and parry of reparte between them would make some interesting reading. Well Done !!!! Seasonal Greetings..... John Someone who thinks logically provides a nice contrast to the real world. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yep, now we know what REALLY happened. Thanks Vicky for informing us....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Good gosh girl, what have you done!? Now Toe and 'Deer are going to go out and bring in LJA just so they can save their sorry behinds... I think you've just laid the three Muskateers quite low...LOL... Looking forward to where all of this might go! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky Brava! When you've got a wit as quick as yours, you don't need a watch. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(giggles in delight) Oh my gosh, I just read his poem but didn't know how to respond! LOL! (kiss on cheek) This is wickedly delightful, sweet friend, savor every minute or you may let your life slip by...and the some...LOL, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vicky, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Ahh..but ya left out one other detail gal...I did get her to take me to her house to get me out of those wet clothes!!!!! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sunshine!! Vicky did NOT lay a Muskateer!  Nor is there any truth to the rumor, MM, that she is going to join Toe and I in a threesome! You people should all be ashamed of besmirching her in this manner!!!  Vicky, ya done REAL good here, exposing that varmit and his sly way. If there's anything Toe knows a lot about, it's about getting none....renamed his waterbed The Dead Sea, last I heard  Well done, lady  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
uh oh, we got another contender on the scene! Let's get ready to rumble! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
*cracks up* Go Mum!! "it was cute, it was like he was shy and didn't want to make it too obvious" |
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Mick Hawkes Member
since 2000-10-26
Posts 90Tees-side , England |
lol i enjoyed it a lot , i look forward to the duels sure to come!!.. Never take life too seriously - None of us gets out alive! |
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Laney Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 85Illinois |
hahaha! talk about power to the ladies! I very muched enjoyed this poem, and the poem in which triggered it! Good Job Girlie!!! ----Alana  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
ROFLMAO... Touche'! LOL Love the poem... and the responses from a couple of delightful scalawags. *G* |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
But the best "line" I've heard works like this....Ya go into a bar, sit next to your "fantasy conquest"....order yourself a drink and a glass of water. You dip the tip of your finger in the water, touch it to her sleeve, then to your own sleeve and say: "Let's go over to your house and get out of these wet clothes." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) this adds another dimension to the ongoing feud..and a third party observer seems to have illuminated Toe's propensity for exagerating... |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
ummmmmmm... Its good? =P.. Nah, its a good poem.. thanks for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
vlraynes, You just dynamited dystopia, enjoyed. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ROTFL. Vicky, you've joined the fray and made my day with this one. LOL at some of these replies, and the suspense is killing me...what's next? |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Oh Vicky!!! LOL...this is too funny! I love it! Poor Toe! Thanks for sharing this with me! I'm laughing so hard! Cindi |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
vlraynes - poor Toe... By the way, where did he throw that Timex? I need another watch... BC |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
(Giggling here) This is so funny! I can't wait to see what happens next. |
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