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But I Promised Part 3 of the trilogy
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But I Promised Part 3 of the trilogy |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England 
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But I Promised Part 3 of the trilogy Take down the stars that shone for me I can’t bear to see them shine so prettily Their incandescence seems to hurt my eyes I need the darkness now to shield my cries I promised you that I would not weep And that promise I do intend to keep But right now my eyes can’t take the light And I have need for the cloak of night Put a blanket of quiet over the restless sea I can’t listen to it meeting the shore eagerly The waves seem to gush with delight Crashing fervently with majestic might I need the silence to swallow my sighs To say that’s only sea spray in my eyes Yes, its salt water, that much is true But I promised I wouldn’t shed tears dew Hold back the sun just for a little while I don’t think I can face the sun’s warm smile Let me wrap my soul away from daylight And hold onto the cloak of blackest night I need a little while before I face the day To linger in dark before the night fades away My promise hangs heavy on my heart Oh it hurts too much to see you depart No one knows more, how foolish to promise you What now seems impossible for me to do Marsha Part 1 The Price /pip/Forum74/HTML/001649.html Part 2 Time’s Gift /pip/Forum74/HTML/001758.html Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
mum excellent writing it was very sad indeed but very true .You never fail to write well and this is outstanding. Beautiful work, exquisite writing, Very well written   love and warm stuff as always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Marsha~ I haven't seen parts 1 & 2 yet, but I did enjoy part 3. This is very beautifully written, and I could feel it as I read. Very nicely done, my friend.  Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"No one knows more, how foolish to promise you What now seems impossible for me to do" but in that love that was so pure impossible becomes a thing of sure... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Marsha, this series sounds so very sad, sweet friend, I hope these feelings haven't been reflecting you, for I send angel hugs out to you in wishing the best happiness and light for you always! (sigh) This is very heartfelt, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Marsha, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I love the whole trilogy. Well done. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This a wonderful end to a cool trilogy Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Mushy, you have done very well with this entire trilogy...hats off to you  (Please e-mail Toerag and tell him to stop waiting for part 4!)  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Shame on you, Bal! *G* Marsha's poem is so wonderful... and I was contemplating how much truth she wraps up in that last couplet... and then I read your dig at Toe and the grins popped out in spite of myself. LOL This is simply fantastic, Marsha... Even if I'd never lost anyone or dreaded the time when I might, it would touch a chord deep inside... As it is, I can't quite stop the tears. Wonderful work! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Mushy, This is a perfect closer to this trilogy. Reality intrudes on even the best of intentions. Very touching collection which is already in my library and will be enjoyed for many years to come.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Marsha, this is also going into my library. This is so well written, and brings back painful memories of when my husband died years ago. If I hadn't had all my friends and family to help me, I don't know how I would have made it. Then, God sent my loving Gary to me. Even though I feel a little guilty sometimes because of my love for Gary, I know in my heart that my deceased husband would want me to have this wonderful love and to be happy. He wouldsn't have wanted me to go through the rest of my life alone, without the special love that Gary and I share. Thanks so much, Marsha for sharing your thoughts and feelings with us. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Melanie New Member
since 2002-11-11
Posts 4California, USA |
Marsha that was very well writen. it brings tears to my eyes because i recently lost someone close to me. the one thing i always loved about poetry is that it evokes emotion and you did a wonderfull job at that. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I agree with the rest, It is a wonderful piece of poetry. I can't imagine where you got the idea for it all, but it works Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
loved it.. especially the ending because knowing you, you will try your best but the feelings will still seep out .. this was wonderful writing ...btw..did you tell Toerag there is not a part 4 to a trilogy?  (smiling at the Deer's remarks) hugs M |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Oh Marsha I can't begin to imagine how difficult this must have been to write. Thank you for once again sharing your beautiful heart with us. Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
An absolutely brilliant piece of work, Marsha... These are feelings I know only too well... except I didn't break my promise and that is why David is with me now.  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Krissy beloved daughter mine thank you love, YOU can always be relied on to keep my life interesting and full of love Vicky darling girl thank you your opinion and your reply are always a welcome sight Kari darling heart time flows on and day will follow night, thank you muchly darling heart Noah darling boy you are always welcome thank you Nan darling heart sister Oh how I thank you darling heart YOU are truly appreciated Loner 23 darling heart Thank you so very much   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart THANK YOU, for the well done and especially for the sunshine of your smile which always brings a grin when its needed. Suthern beloved heart YOU are wonderful and your spirit brings such understanding and such comfort. When the rain comes I know where I’ll find my shelter . Thank you always beloved heart Larry darling man I knew that you would understand this trilogy almost better than anyone else Noah darling boy you are always welcome thank you Garysgirl darling girl Thank you for sharing your joy with us dear lady. Time might not wait but eventually the sun will come out this I know Melanie darling girl ……. That you read this and it evoked emotion means that you have a loving heart and can feel poetry within. Thank you very much your reply is lovely Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved one…….. Thank you, since you know me so well I didn’t have to tell you where this came from, YOU know. I could give you a throw away line beloved one but in this case I’ll just say thank you, no star could ever match the glow that is the light you shine on my soul. Little Mo thank you for all your loving smiles and for the touch of you within Lyra darling heart, you deserve happiness, I shall carry within me always the memory of this which will warm me when it gets too cold and light my soul when it gets too dark. Thank you for you dear friend Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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