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Before the Dim
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Before the Dim |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Before the Dim light a candle before the dim a laugh just splashed and left the pool empty though one ripple remains a lantern over the well no goodbye yet sweet echo is caught of final breath gone the flesh too close this recall that touches the laugh the music lives cannot grieve I see his hold still gripped on light yet I know that it is night light a candle before the dim tell a feeling when don’t wait the gate that swings on whim when closed will be too late |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling within the imagery... the ripple is widening... hugging this.... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
ooo ooo I love line 2~! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mrtie~ Absolutely exquisite~ I ... loved it ALL~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
candles kiss the sky with winks of light darkness swallows and smiles star teeth the dim is never dim long enjoyed this moment with you martie.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Truth always lights a candle. Well done.  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Martie, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love it, you always light candles of sincerity and truth with your words, yay, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - it is so sad when a friend leaves us - I am sure his spirit was with you as you wrote this wonderful poem - you write so touchingly - Paul |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"the gate that swings on whim when closed will be too late" Exactly. Give the hugs and say those words today. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This is truly one of the nicest moments I have ever shared with you Martie, and there have been many. I love this one and its a keeper. The most valuable thing you own is a smile, wear it, and share it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
a lantern over the well no goodbye yet sweet echo is caught of final breath gone the flesh too close this recall that touches the laugh the music lives cannot grieve I see his hold still gripped on light yet I know that it is night light a candle before the dim tell a feeling when don't wait ======================== hauntingly beautiful ... like a whispered prayer at midnight...and the message to not take any of the moments held close for granted is heard across the distance. heart-hugs  If all the tear drops went to heaven |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
no favorite lines in this one Martie, just a warm feeling and big smile...... Loved this....... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Losing someone you are close to is hard... even more difficult when you feel your own vulnerability of yourself... We never know when, we only know we will go too, at some time in our lives.... Hugs Martie.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Life is here and gone in the blink of an eye.. We should say 'I love you' now. Martie...this one is superb! ~Hugs sweet poetess~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
You and Taylor have my most heartfelt condolences, sweetie. Big *hugs* to you both. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea...thank you for the hugs! Virginia...thanks for letting me know about line 2. Always appreciate your comments. Marge--Thanks, my friend/sis. Hugs back at ya! DS--Thank you for your caring ways! Sy--yes, I think it does...thanks for your insight. Noah--Thank you so much. Paul---What a lovely comment...I hope I was touched by his spirit. Midnite--exactly! Sharon--I really appreciate you telling me that...thank you. Janet Marie--You are very good at hearing across distances...I'm thankful! Magnus--Yes, dear...so very true. Hugs! Nancy--Yes, say it now and say it often. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael--I must have just missed you...thank you for your loving friendship! |
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Gabriel Frost Member
since 2002-08-15
Posts 216Between midnight thoughts |
Brilliant. An excellent portrayal of love and loss! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I love the laugh leaving the pool, Martie... just leaving a ripple behind... beautiful imagery here...  ~ hugs from the puddleLyra |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, beautiful...yes. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Martie- This is just gorgeous. So soft and tender yet the message rings loud and clear. Big HUGS,  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (08-27-2002 05:04 AM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Beautiful as always Martie. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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