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Measured Response (Lacey)
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Measured Response (Lacey) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Turned out neither of us ate. Lacey was having a hard time looking at me And when she did, it was as if she were 6 years old But had lived them a thousand times only to be caught Telling her Grandmother she Hated her When she really didn’t. I understood well enough what she felt And could only hope the nut twisted feeling I had in my gut wasn’t bleeding out my own eyes. “Travis,” she finally spoke “would you understand at all if I told you I wasn’t sure?” I looked at the floor and focused on the head of a nail Someone had driven in one of the floorboards to stop a squeak Or to patch some damage that had been done long ago Making a new board necessary. “Lacey, I guess I have to, or move on, and of late I’m not sure where else I would go.” I said trying to keep the beg out of my voice and the blood pumping well enough in me heart not to be pale. “Tell you what, Lacey, “ I went on as I stared at that nail head and fighting the urge my feet had to walk. “I saw a place on the way down here for rent, let me go see what they want for it.” “Figure if I run this time I have no chance, but if I stay I might.” She just nodded With tear trickles down her cheek And mumbled “ok” I walked over to her and kissed her forehead Then headed for the front door, but stopped And rested both hands on the frame of the door “Lacey, I think I could love you, but we both know we don’t know that either.” The place cost 750 a month And is about 8 miles from Lacey’s But the distance between here and there Measures better in fears |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
He stays. He's a champ. He'll be a winner. and Lacey? .... |
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rkcraig Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 202Cincinnati, Ohio, USA |
Lacey doesn't know what she's missing |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) It too feels like 2,000 miles away when there is so much fear in the picture, it sounds like such an excruciating journey! (sad sigh) I agree she doesn't know what she is missing, this is a powerful counter-emotional response, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The place cost 750 a month And is about 8 miles from Lacey’s But the distance between here and there Measures better in fears ================================= we need an icon for "moth kicked in chest" impact ........ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Very interesting, Capt. Ron. Looking for the next one....  Hugs, Ethel |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Fearmeter just went to level 10..... but does holding your breath help? |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Perhaps it is not love, but it is a whole lot more than like.... a wonderful beginning, a mini-commitment when laying down even temporary roots....an act of faith and hope in the most charming of ways.... as he comes to terms with his past pain and acknowledges fear of being hurt again....and being able to withstand such....and fear of hurting her, for what if he can't love another...but, then what if he can...interesting to find out... love this story...and his character... not clear if she is unsure only about him, or about him and Davis... enjoying, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I'm so lost (but love it), I feel like I've walked into the middle of something I shouldn't be staring at!  Happily reading along... |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
Ron....keep writing!!! LOL I should curl up with a novel, but my laptop works just fine! Nicole, my recommendation is that you go into the archives and find every bit of Lacey you can and read, read, read!!!!!! you will love every word of it. KS |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...Love is a story, that has many different tellings and is always interesting..enjoying this! |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Very touching, Captain... beautifuly done. Sunkissed."I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ron, to me, your most honest work yet. Cor |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
the pain of life, sometimes it just doesnt seem fair.....heart hugs.....I hope if it is meant to be it works out for you....Peace Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I just love these little vignettes -- still think you should make a book of 'em! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lacey better grab him right quick!! ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And that measure is a lot harder to conquer than mere miles. *S* This is wonderful, Cap'n! |
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