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Backyard Lewis and Clarke |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Cautiously parting the thick stalks of grass we made our way across the opening, stopping only to wipe sweat beads from our brow, we moved painstakingly so as not to give our position away. I was the first to spy the it, hiding in the undergrowth, and I pointed it out to my partner. What is it? he asked. Having never seen one before, he was quite amazed. I had encountered one or two before, but never one of this magnitude. The creature was now aware of our presence so we held very still. I told my partner that his forefeet poised in the air meant he was ready to attack. Just as a warrior would, whichever way we tried to move, warily he countered. At this point my partner had more questions than I had answers, where are his eyes?is he looking at me?do you think he likes trucks? does he like me?can he talk?what does he eat?do you think he wants to be my friend?…so when our stomachs started to growl I took my reluctant explorer inside for peanut butter and jelly. We continued our quest later that same day, but the creature, newly dubbed "Mantisaurus", was nowhere to be found. Luckily for me my partner had an explanation that I was happy to confirm. He said with all the authority possessed by a 4 year old…who had previously been made to go inside against his better judgment… I think the Mantisaurus left because he was crying for me…. Author's note: despite repeated explanations of how and why the insect got his proper name, as seen through the eyes of an extremely inquisitive explorer, a baby praying mantis, no bigger than an inch, was given the very impressive name of Mantisaurus. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
cute story of discovery and perceptions... I enjoyed! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thanks  I know these are more stories than poems, but I write them, so that they will forever be captured...you know how us old people tend to forget  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Well writing them is always a wonderful way to share them and preserve them.. Story poems always intrigue me..in part I guess because I would love to be adept at writing them... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
lol........me too...it is something I have just tried lately....the one about Country songs was my first...I wrote it first in my usual freestyle...and then in want of something different and more striking, I took out all the line breaks and reformatted the whole thing...so nothing special there...you just gotta have a good subject, and my little one fills me with inspiration |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
hope you two don't mind the interruption, but i thoroughly enjoyed this, I was certain it was a mantis just before the pb and j episode, but I like your 4 yr old didn't want to go in, I wanted to know if I was right I will say that there was wonderful suspense right up unitl I thought I knew and a tiny bit of suspense after that until you confirmed. Really liked your narrative poem, lots! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this, lady... You're stretching your styles with great grace and had me peeking over your shoulder to see this fierce critter you'd discovered. *G* Thanks for sharing your adventures... the smiles are greatly appreciated. *S* |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
I two was captured with your partners facination, & pre guessed the insects commom name. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
enjoyed your poem, very creative write. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JellyBeans~ This is precious~ Thank you so much for sharing~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all....your comments make me smile almost as much as he does |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Since I am a descendant of Merriwether Lewis I had to read this. Not what I thought it would be yet I enjoyed it tremendously. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh Interloper I am honored to have your comment on my poem...I had a different title and changed at the last minute...glad you enjoyed |
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