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Open Poetry #15

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WRBreezin
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since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

0 posted 2001-08-06 06:51 AM

New and Old

Twenty strokes tore stripes
across my back
Agony by number to match
the count of days our limbs
locked in wanton harness
A price I pay without thought
for the swell of your person
to cover me again
Be quick my sage heart
bare your lace and know me
as new and old together at once
The night spends itself without mercy
daylight finds me bleeding

Willie
©2001

ShannonM
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 104
Drifitng

1 posted 2001-08-06 06:57 AM

Hello, Willie.

Sounds like a mighty torturous thing goin' on. I hope you haven't really been whipped. Get up, the night is over.

ShannonM

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-08-06 07:03 AM

Be quick my sage heart
bare your lace and know me
as new and old together at once
The night spends itself without mercy
daylight finds me bleeding
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this is excellent...
vivid intense imagery...lovely poetic vocabulary and phrasing.
a soulful write.
well done poet sir.
jm

slow burn ...
light a candle for our love
So that we will always be
one on one in lovely love

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

3 posted 2001-08-07 01:57 AM

Very well done, Willie. Your words bring intense images.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

4 posted 2001-08-07 02:19 AM

I'm a new reader here and I am finding many poems that make me think. Yours also makes me feel.

WRBreezin
Member

since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

5 posted 2001-08-09 08:51 AM

Thanks folks, I'm glad this caught your eyes!

Willie

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