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Jessica

Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 350
South AL

0 posted 2001-07-25 10:47 PM

Unspoken secrets lie,
To what the truth reveals.
Privacy is a blessing,
But does it truely heal?
Subconcious minds hide,
From what the heart warns.
Running in circles,
From what we scorn.
Hearts made of cold stone,
Burning with emotions fuel,
Sailing slowly through time,
Passing the needed docks appearing cruel.
How do we let down the anchor,
We cannot find?
Where is the acceptance,
We long for in our mind?

What don't kill you can only make you stronger...

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

1 posted 2001-07-25 10:50 PM

Like I told you through Yahoo Pager..I love this one. There is nothing about it I would change. That acceptance we're always searching for...I can definitely relate.

I love the use of marine references in the last little section. The thought of a ship sailing through troubled seas and not being accepted at various ports brings a good analogy with this.

Keep it up, chica. *hugs*
-Adam

"Love, like the Rose, is desired. And like the Rose, Love has its thorns." - Unknown

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-07-26 01:46 AM

Jessica #2- I liked this alot.
The flow was done relatively well.
The thoughts here were great.
Nice write.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-07-26 03:50 PM

I liked the ending of this one Jess. Well done here.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-07-26 06:37 PM

loved this piece!...every word hit me...and got my mind going...i enjoyed this compeletly...amazing job here...hope to see more...as i related to this one...bye Jess#2

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

5 posted 2001-07-27 06:39 AM

Privacy is a blessing,
But does it truely heal?

this is a nice peice..i enjoyed it greatly..thanks for sharing..

"Killer in me is a killer in you, my love
Send a smile over to you"
Disarm
Smashing Pumkins

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

6 posted 2001-07-27 02:55 PM

This was very good work. I enjoyed it. It was powerful. keep writing.

Regina

JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

7 posted 2001-07-27 02:56 PM

Jessica
this was a really strong piece.
i enjoyed the read.

~Jeff~

"Smoking kills. If you're killed, you've lost a very important part of your life."
-Brooke Shields

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

8 posted 2001-08-01 03:28 PM

The emotions you portrayed here are excellent... very strong. I really enjoyed this one. Nicely done, Jessica. Very good job.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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