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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH 
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I love how you make me smile So I sit and talk to you awhile I talk to you about how my life had been And I notice you're not like other men Even though you live so far away I talk to you almost everyday We even talk into late hours of the night It doesn't bother me, it's alright At night I sit and look at the stars And I wonder how and where you are I know one day I will look in your eyes And see a love I know never dies I tell you how much I miss you And you say taht you miss me too Each day I look to the heaven's above I know one day we will share our love ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This took me two days to write, had kind of a block, I hope this is good... Kristin I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
beautfiul  ...i REAllY like how you expressed these emotions...you did a wonderful job on writing it out.im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I'm w/ Alby- you did a wonderful job on expressing your emotions and feelings. An absolute beautiful job. I can relate to it a bit- I'm sure others will to. |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Its the perfect "Dream" am i correct, you find a guy that you can talk to and that you can trust even if its over the internet all though thats where the best ones are found... im glad you have someone to talk to and to share your feelings i only hope everyone else could find someone just like this.. Nice poem All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I didn't really like this one from you. It isn't as good as some of the others. It's still good for a writers block piece though. ~AF~ Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was cliche sweet, but how else can you write a cliche sweet poem? This was perfect for what it was meant to be. I thought it was beautiful.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
it's beautiful for your first attempt at rhyming  lol, but I wanna do something. me and you should do a collab one weekend. sound good? hows about, next weekend? do you think yer parents would let me spend the night?I LOVE ZU, hey Albie, Cody, Allan, Carly, Cherish, Lizzy, Kris, *HUGS JAVI*, Tamma, Acire, and Branden. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is very good, Kris! I really enjoyed the read. Very sweet... is this an internet relationship? It sounded like it. if it is, I know how you feel. Some of my closest friends live hundreds, even thousands of miles away. Anyway, very nicely done. These are beautiful thoughts. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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angel_2401 Member
since 2001-06-12
Posts 131Cincinnati, OH |
Thanx for all the replies, yeah, Stace, that would be cool! And Marie, yes it is.. but ya know.... I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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