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The Poet's Death
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The Poet's Death |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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The fire sticks on the hearth Throw one in the chamber Explode my weakened heart You are the cold that lingers I’m too old to die in the manner of a poet’s death Crashed out Burned out And you can smell my breath I am the foolish Enterprise The one your friends Said wasn’t wise There’s a redeeming Quality In your gleaming tear stained eye Tis the glint of the heavens Or just another lullabye I am the stock pond put in here what you will what you hope to draw out. You don’t fill me with riches You just fill me with doubt I am the shield that supports your faith I am the gentleman I am the wraith I am the gondola that soars to the peak Lay on your weight and watch me go weak I...I...I... I think I’ve found the poets death I've simply run out of breath! [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 01-18-2001).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Walt~ "I...I...I... I think I’ve found the poets death I've simply run out of breath!" Not you.......not yet....... wonderful write!  -SEA |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Great writing, Walt...but your wrong...the poets death is simply running out of words...and you haven't!...(I know, I know..it doesn't rhyme) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Walty, you son of a gun lol this was great, keep writing my friend, you could never run out of breath or words. loved it Maree |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I have to agree with the others. I believe the capacity of your pen will never allow you to run out of breath. This was Fantastic. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Amen. Kathleen |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ What a ponderous penning - 'I am the stock pond put in here what you hope to draw out.' MARVELOUS THOUGHT ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Walt, no death in you by all that's true instead take stick in what you've got a gift of life for all to see found here in your poetry. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Lana Member
since 2000-12-26
Posts 68 |
I like your style!! |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you all i am so glad i can show my different ways all in one forum o yuh |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Walt, I enjoyed this and can sense the struggle in it. Wonderfully done. |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Walt, I partially disagree with some of the others. I think that a person's writing can run out of breath and in turn die. only the writer knows this and sometimes it may just be temporary or a false alarm. however, where i come from (who knows) death is a rebirth and a new, everlasting life follows. may your penthoughts be everlasting. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
temptress thank you so much cruz you cerebral sucka |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hmm..a thinker is this one a poets death..sure a poet can run out of words..temporarily  and run out of breath? well..we will all die..but a poet will live on in his poetry interesting write walt  hugs, g "oh baby baby, its a wild world..its hard to get by just upon a smile..." cat stevens |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Intriguing piece. Does that mean you're headed for the Society? ;o} |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
LOL Walt...I cant ever imagine you with nothing left to say...you are a dreamer who dreams his tecnicolour dreams for us all to see...thanks |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanks heheh i was realizing that i could go on all night with the poem so i had to end it so i died in it yuh |
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WinterTalon Member
since 2001-01-14
Posts 141Brooksville, KY, USA |
Kinda reminds me of my poem Poetic Consequence... Uh, no one dies, necessarily. Well, anywayz, good one. I really liked it, for all its negativity. Who am I kidding? I'm all about writing negatively! Poetry, that is... ~The hardest thing is watching the one you love... love someone else.~ |
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