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JLHunter
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0 posted 2006-10-19 08:24 AM

A Love So Rare

I came upon her in the fall,
An unassuming innocent.
She smelled of jasmine from the spring,
As though it followed where she went.
A beauty, yes--both thin and tall--
With honey blonde to frame her face.
She walked unnerved by anything,
The very archetype of grace.

And how a girl of tender years
Could know my pain from times gone by,
Is such a wonder to behold
That wise men shake their heads and sigh.
So suddenly my grief and tears
Are soothed beneath her loving hand,
That ages hence when tales are told,
Her story will the crowd demand.

And so I chart a course for love
--Ignoring fears of gales and night--
And set my sails for magic climes,
A beacon for my fateful flight.
As God himself from up above
Seems lovingly to fill my sails,
I dream of milk and honey times
Where doubt is lost and love prevails.

And, Oh! What dreams may teach us all!
When chancing love we bare our soul,
To find that one whose heart is pure
When passion's thrall exerts its pull.
And so I smile and heed the call
That leads me down the path to bliss.
Enveloped in the aching need
Of swelling heart and telling kiss.

Now all my days are spent in peace,
As side by side my love and I
Will prove our happiness to each
With many a contented sigh.
We lay ourselves on softest fleece
--Two souls as one, without a care--
To celebrate what none can teach
And consummate our love so rare.

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

passing shadows
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1 posted 2006-10-19 08:43 AM

the rhyme scheme here is just brilliant!

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2006-10-19 08:47 AM

A return to innocense.
Lovely write.

Enchantress
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3 posted 2006-10-19 09:13 AM

So beautiful..and yes, innocent.
A love such as this so rare indeed.

Well done poet Sir..well done indeed.

Hugs~Nancy

Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~

JLHunter
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4 posted 2006-10-19 09:14 AM

Thanks, Shadows!

I couldn't sleep.

As it so often happens, I am most inspired when the world is dark and others sleep.

Thanks for the nice comment!

John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

JLHunter
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5 posted 2006-10-19 09:18 AM

Thanks, TD.

It is an innocent about whom I am writing. Alas, the "who" must remain a secret--for now!

Ooooh! How mysterious!

John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

JLHunter
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6 posted 2006-10-19 09:27 AM

Hi, Nancy.

Youthful love is wonderful to remember and even nicer to experience but, sadly, I am way past my days of youth!

I am a child at heart, but that doesn't count I have found.

John xo

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

froggy
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7 posted 2006-10-19 10:28 AM

Beautiful read.

:-)

Until he extends the circle of his compassion to all living things,
man will not himself find peace."

Albert Schweitzer,
Nobel Peace Prize Wi

Kira Aso
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8 posted 2006-10-19 10:32 AM

This was brilliant and beatiful!
Such a love lovely description of love...

Very well done!

~Kira

Marge Tindal

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9 posted 2006-10-19 11:05 AM

John~

'I am most inspired when the world is dark and others sleep.'

This thought is, in itself, poetically inspiring~

May I ?

OF COURSE I CAN~
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*Huglets*

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

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10 posted 2006-10-19 11:08 AM

John

Love such as this keeps, though age and distance yearn to forget...and your writing captured it. Beautiful!

JLHunter
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11 posted 2006-10-19 12:06 PM

Thanks, froggy!

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

JLHunter
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12 posted 2006-10-19 12:12 PM

Hi, Kira.

I always was a sucker for a pretty face. They put me in such a poetic mood...

Thanks for the beautiful comments!

John

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

JLHunter
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13 posted 2006-10-19 12:16 PM

Hi, Marge.

As always, your creative side springs to life! I thought that your poem was very cute!

Thanks for calling me an "inspiration." I haven't heard that one before!

John xo

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

JLHunter
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14 posted 2006-10-19 12:18 PM

Thanks, Martie.

Your response was very nice, and not a little bit poetic itself!

John xo

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

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15 posted 2006-10-19 02:04 PM

You've not begun to catch your youth yet, John. Not as long as there is an ember in your soul that ignites thoughts profound and tender. Not as long as the fire of your mind can cause anothers to combust with your words.

No, your youth is yet to be caught.

This is amazing, your Poem, your thoughts.

Sandra

JLHunter
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16 posted 2006-10-19 02:46 PM

Hi, Sandra.

Oh, I am the first to admit that I am a big kid. I like to say that I am in touch with my inner child! Some people wish that I would grow up, but I have too much fun!

Anyhow, thanks for your amazing review, once again. I am ferklempt!

John xo

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

The Lady
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17 posted 2006-10-19 09:26 PM

your "innocent who" intrigues me John
this poem intrigues me too
lovely...

JLHunter
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18 posted 2006-10-20 09:34 AM

Thanks, TL.

I am only being mysterious to protect tender sensibilites not my own.

Thanks for writing.

John xo

I prefer to be a dreamer among the humblest, with visions to be realized, than lord among those without dreams and desires. -Khalil Gibran

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