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Open Poetry #39

Once There Was A City

MukkaKukka
Member

since 2006-09-18

Posts 88
Finland

0 posted 2006-10-03 12:33 PM

Prominent edifice

Reflected on water

People fell through their footprints

Like dogs sucked in sewers.

The ones that could hold up their head

Popped their balloons with skyspikes.

And all the fallers, dwellers floated on water

Watching the magnificent glow.

Triskaidekaphobia
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 251
In a state of disrepair...

1 posted 2006-10-03 12:45 PM

I love the imagary here, MukkaKukka.

"People fell through their footprints"

And what an excellent line this is.

Enjoyed it a lot. I think I shall come back later to read through again.

"The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun
With Coca Cola clouds behind a Big Mac sun."

One God by The Beautiful South

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

2 posted 2006-10-03 02:18 PM

I loved too!
An instant fav!

DreamerSpirit
Member

since 2006-10-02

Posts 240
Buenos Aires, Argentina

3 posted 2006-10-03 03:19 PM

Very good poem, i really liked it.
Short and Exciting to read.
Good Work!.

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