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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
belongs to something else feeling function as supports you say there's need between the waves; the other says let ties bind until tides swell until rivers are crossed.. if they are sense of belonging ties of kin primtive nature explores new brim, feeling of emptyness replaces vanished humoid as arms once waved escape landscapes brutal calmness folds us in. was always there that tie of being part of you ethereal tie support functions life support until ties waned you turn back in vain emptyness filled void as rivers swelled and bodies went amiss when rivers are crossed. [This message has been edited by wordwizard (09-27-2006 04:55 PM).] |
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william foos Member
since 2006-09-13
Posts 77schenectady,new york,usa |
good write but i would like to know one thing when rivers cross which way to the fish swim keep doing well love the papa i see what i write and write what i see |
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wordwizard Member
since 2003-09-08
Posts 483on the way to next world |
I've read that you don't use punctuation, you might revise that idea if ever you've completed an idea and normally one pauses when reading an idea before going onto the next. There I finished an idea. Now about personal pronouns, they are all capitalized, so you wouldn't be above anybody else if most of humanity uses them. Would you then be saying that the lot of us are conceited because we use capitals? Hmmm. We do have something in common though, rivers, so may yours keep flowing like your ideas. |
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