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marcel
Senior Member

since 2003-03-02

Posts 660
az, usa

0 posted 2006-09-19 11:19 PM

The Rose Unfolds

I want to sing to you a rose
And smell the fragrance of your smile
While you sip on nectars of love and prose
As I toast in laughter to spring’s beguile
Wondering if a kiss holds still a moment
Like frozen landscapes of dreams and lost lovers
Shattering from auburn light tonight Heavenly sent
A sparkling aura of diamonds reflecting forever
Beyond which distant suns and forgiven sins bleed
Bringing to truth this song from the cold
So I can steal your heart from content once feigned
Until you believe in my words as happiness unfolds...

Marcel

BloodyEclipse
Junior Member

since 2006-09-07

Posts 16

1 posted 2006-09-20 05:46 AM

I don't think "I" can help you become better... You have skills.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2006-09-20 07:22 AM

A breathtaking rendering here Keith.
The flow of this one was magical...
"Like frozen landscapes of dreams and lost lovers
Shattering from auburn light tonight Heavenly sent
A sparkling aura of diamonds reflecting forever
Beyond which distant suns and forgiven sins bleed"

But this...this was just WOW!
TD

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2006-09-20 09:08 AM

delightful tones, speaking volumns...

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2006-09-20 09:26 AM

I believe! Please sing to me!

I've been missing your poems of love! Good to see you back. Hope you stay awhile this time!!!

Linda

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2006-09-21 12:37 PM

beauty!

I've missed reading you Keith

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2006-09-22 10:35 PM

Again

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

7 posted 2006-09-23 12:27 PM

I enjoyed the read, my favorite:

"Wondering if a kiss holds still a moment
Like frozen landscapes of dreams and lost lovers"

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

8 posted 2006-09-23 03:22 AM

Beautiful! Got to agree with TD's comment!

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

9 posted 2006-09-23 09:04 AM

Keith~

There is such overwhelming beauty in your thoughts~

'As I toast in laughter to spring’s beguile
Wondering if a kiss holds still a moment
Like frozen landscapes of dreams and lost lovers
Shattering from auburn light tonight Heavenly sent
A sparkling aura of diamonds reflecting forever'

BIG SIGHS~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

10 posted 2006-09-29 07:10 PM

You are quite good at this...excellent
writings.

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