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FiercestCalm Junior Member
since 2006-06-24
Posts 31michigan |
in the eyes behind your eyes you see that if you just peel back all our surface layers underneath we are all pink glowing vibrant newborns rooting for breasts craving our mothers craving her warmth in the ears behind your ears you hear that below all of our distractionary babble we are all softly crying lost blind babies using the only voice we know weeping for shelter weeping for home in the tongue beneath your tongue you taste that behind our sour bitter sweet pungent auras our skin tastes of autumn leaves and salty seas floating creatures pushed by the tide pulled by the moon from where we burst forth screaming until the day we die we are all mere humans kissed by God one glorious day then sent on our way to see how long it takes for us to make our way back home "You can do no great things, just small things with great Love."~Mother Theresa |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
An interesting poem - nice development towards the good-bye kiss from god. Of course god comes off as a cruel tease, but if there is a god, that may be the case. Good writing. PLEASE VISIT MY REGULARLY UPDATED WEB SITE http://www.anthonyarmstrong.zoomshare.com |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome Michigan  You wove these threads in symbiance with a greater good, and a human frailty. The truest beauty by design, that there is. Well done. TD |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
I love it...I love it...your words feed the soul and return the memories long forgotten....Stunning...Thank you....*big hugs* |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
A magnificently perspicacious view, superbly put! And how I agree with what you said! The third stanza has me reeling. I don't agree with shirtless about how you depicted God. I think you suggested that He presents us with a fair challenge. I am soooooo pleased I have found your work. I am enjoying it immensely. - Owl |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh how I do love that ending!! Wow! |
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