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Martie

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0 posted 2006-06-15 07:39 PM

Willing to Take on Dragons

Time has taken you away
pieces float
some are the color of your eyes
or the sharp fragrance
that took you hard past luck
into the pit
where someone threw rocks

I can feel the rough side
against the soft paper of me
your cheek like sand
where you understood my bare feet
for you were not the one
the one who applied sunscreen
or combed out the snarls

apart you played a part

Listening with your earphones cocked
to the symphony that built walls
keeping your monotone safe
where there was no need to sell anything

I know now
that you were willing to take on dragons
when I didn’t even know you had a weapon
---------
for my father

Goldenrose
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1 posted 2006-06-15 07:50 PM

A fine write and personal too..from within the secret area of your heart...thank you for sharing and beaming some sunshine into a personal harbor of your mind garden..

Goldenrose.

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2 posted 2006-06-15 08:03 PM

Oh my, what a soulful piece this is Martie.
Hugs and thanks, for being you.
And you take on dragons every day my friend, with the grace of a gentle goddess.

Nightshade

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just out of reach

3 posted 2006-06-15 08:21 PM

Our fathers .... our heroes.
Awesome Martie.
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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4 posted 2006-06-15 08:25 PM

"I can feel the rough side
against the soft paper of me
your cheek like sand
where you understood my bare feet
for you were not the one
the one who applied sunscreen
or combed out the snarls"

My favorite stanza. Great write and an even better read as fathers day is fast approaching.

Larry C

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5 posted 2006-06-15 08:31 PM

Martie,
So very well done. Much food for thought and much love to ponder. Memorializing without deifying. So very well done. You have evoked much emotion in my heart and mind. Thank you.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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Canada eh.

6 posted 2006-06-15 08:35 PM

"I know now
that you were willing to take on dragons
when I didn’t even know you had a weapon"

Wonderful dear Martie...
most wonderful.

Hugs~Nancy

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Magnus

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7 posted 2006-06-15 08:59 PM

Gosh dear lady, you know how to make the
gut tighten up a little, doncha?

Exceptional....your heart speaks this day.

StevenS
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8 posted 2006-06-15 09:16 PM

Beautiful Martie, the last line blows me away, it says so much. :-)

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9 posted 2006-06-15 09:45 PM

I think that you've captured the heart of a father separated from his daughter very well here... As I am one.

quote:
...I know now
that you were willing to take on dragons
when I didn’t even know you had a weapon...

(sigh) It does give me hope to know that you've come to realize this about your Father.

-Bob

Martie

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10 posted 2006-06-15 09:52 PM

Bob....the seperation is from death...my father passed in 1981....I am seeing him from more mature eyes. Thank you, poet friends for your words about this poem.

Sunshine

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11 posted 2006-06-15 09:53 PM

some are the color of your eyes
...or the sharp fragrance
that took you hard past luck
into the pit
where someone threw rocks

I can feel the rough side
against the soft paper of me
your cheek like sand
where you understood my bare feet...

~*~

How I understand
these childhood memories...

it is wonderful, this coming
father's day, where we remember
not only the living
but those who gave
life....

thank you for this, Sissie...

thank you.

ThisDiamond
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12 posted 2006-06-15 10:28 PM

You embraced me, as father's day approaches...Thanks Martie

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13 posted 2006-06-16 05:47 PM

"...you were willing to take on dragons
when I didn’t even know you had a weapon"

yeah.

jody5
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14 posted 2006-06-16 05:55 PM

Martie, this was a wonderful Fathers day poem written so personally. I enjoyed it very much.

Huggs Kimberly

Lighthousebob
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15 posted 2006-06-16 05:57 PM

Thank you for clarification and I'm sorry to read of your loss.

Obviously, I'm not dead, thank God, but like you, my daughter is older (28 years old) and more mature than when she was a child and we do have a closer relationship now than we have ever had in the past. God bless you, Martie, and thanks again for your kind words of encouragement.

-Bob

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16 posted 2006-06-16 06:16 PM

Ah   YES !!!!    And those dragons come in so many different forms.  Yet...He slew everyone...or at least...kept them at bay.
::smiles::   ((((Martie))))  You ROCK !!!!!
LOL   And you wear the armor well.

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17 posted 2006-06-16 09:57 PM

Thanks for sharing a memory, Martie.
You always write them with such tenderness.

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18 posted 2006-06-17 07:44 AM

Martie, you have spoken for all of us who have lost our Fathers...

I am touched.
Wishing you a comforting day
hugs
M

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19 posted 2006-06-17 08:10 AM

Martie, this touches me and reminds me much of my own father, his gruffness, yet gentleness. Hugging you for this one sweetie.

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20 posted 2006-06-17 09:58 AM

Interesting. Nice write.

Marge Tindal

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21 posted 2006-06-17 11:29 AM

MartieSis~
Yes ... and as tomorrow approaches the memories of my father will encircle me with tender moments of remember~

Thank you for being a beautifully thoughtful poetess~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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22 posted 2006-06-17 04:37 PM

I'm glad I didn't miss this, having only been here off and on briefly through working and sleeping

something about this really touched me today

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23 posted 2006-06-18 05:56 PM

This is an exquisite mélange of magic, wisdom, observation and beauty, woven into the complexity and simplicity of an English country garden, as only Martie knows how.

- Owl

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24 posted 2006-06-19 09:01 AM

Even more than a woman, you can tell a man by his children, when they're grown. Your father raised -- well, you know what he raised -- and aside from this loving poem of memory, he raised a daughter who could and would write it. That alone tells beautifully, what a man he was.

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25 posted 2006-06-19 09:21 AM

Excellent write!

Paul Wilson

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26 posted 2006-06-19 02:20 PM

Martie...Great poem. To me it shows the rought and tuff side of your father and what he would go through to protect and comfort you and at the same time the gentle side of him thru your eyes. Thanks for sharing...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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27 posted 2006-06-19 02:43 PM

Martie, you so inspire a whole network of visuals...exceptional writing

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28 posted 2006-06-19 03:15 PM

I love it...how blessed you are to have had a father like that....Wonderful writing...*big hugs*

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29 posted 2006-06-19 04:28 PM

Martie - I meant to get back here earlier but I hope I'm not the last one to commend you on a truly marvelous tribute to your father. Such a beautiful "Martie write"!

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30 posted 2006-06-19 06:37 PM

I think this is quite special, dear Martie.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

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31 posted 2006-06-19 07:10 PM

Martie,
What a fine tribute your depth of understanding makes.
Doc

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32 posted 2006-06-22 12:59 PM

I know now
that you were willing to take on dragons
when I didn’t even know you had a weapon

What a beautiful tribute... to your father... and all the daddies who'd do anything to protect their children. *S*

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33 posted 2006-06-23 01:44 AM

a steady father...the rock of Gibralter? How would that be, to have a dad like that? I love how you see past the surface of him to his essence of strength and constancy. Your words touch me. Thank you, Marty!

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34 posted 2006-06-29 07:52 AM

very very nice Martie - Paul

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