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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2006-05-29 07:52 AM


Doubt

Doubt is the fog that hides the shoal
The goal and light within the soul
It is the veil of a cloudy night
The mist that holds the stars from sight

It is the smoke from green woods fire
The ash that covers desire
It is the vague of underrate
The muffling of exhilarate

But doubt can burn the fire bright
And yet can suffocate the light
It is the yin and yang of do
It has the clothing of a coup

It has the power of a flower
To live and die within the hour
A sense of dear that’s held by fear
That holds the heart against a spear

The sense of doubt is good and bad
That only time can unclad



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S Arthur Grey
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1 posted 2006-05-29 08:35 AM


Too true, too true
how it can undo.

scorpio
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2 posted 2006-05-29 08:50 AM


A profound write Sy. No doubt about it.

believe in what your heart feels...

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3 posted 2006-05-29 10:51 AM


No doubt about it .... you are one amazing poet.
Love this Seymour and I am keepin' it!
hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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4 posted 2006-05-29 11:06 AM


good read
Martie
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5 posted 2006-05-29 01:15 PM


Wise words, dear Sy.  
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6 posted 2006-05-29 01:27 PM


Wonderful pearls of wisdom today Sy!
Luv & Hugs, Nancy

~ Trace my body with your words,
  in doing so, you touch my heart ~

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7 posted 2006-05-29 01:43 PM


Mr. T., your flower power can blow all the foggy doubting schtuff to smithereens!

Loves 'n hugs,

EA
Flowers

Klassy Lassy
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8 posted 2006-05-29 06:22 PM


Doubt, "is the smoke from green woods fire"!  What an exquisite metaphor this is.  I can see it  and feel the the wist of heart for light and warmth to leap with confidence.  

Undoubtedly, though, your poems are always gems to read.  I come away thinking, feeling, and frequently smiling.
This time, I wonder at your choice of words.  They evoke strong images.


Klassy

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9 posted 2006-05-29 06:30 PM


Sy,  I rarely find a hiccup in your art.
BUT........The ash that covers desire
It just seems to stop prematurely and
doesn't flow as well as all the other
lines...Perhaps "The ash that covers one's
desire"?  ???

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