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Jason Lyle
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With my darkling

0 posted 2005-11-09 04:54 PM


She said with a purpose
pay for what
you did

funny thing was
I thought
I already had

15 years of
I guess I 'll be
wrong again

I lived this
bruise
and sorry mom

anger
is a weakness
does it make you
feel strong?

you are as weak as
I left you
how does it taste?

when he taste
the distaste
of your
heart


[This message has been edited by Jason Lyle (11-10-2005 07:26 AM).]

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with you
1 posted 2005-11-09 09:44 PM


I'm not sure what this is about exactly, but it feels painful and strong...
iliana
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2 posted 2005-11-10 12:03 PM


Jason, this left me questioning alot of things....I found it to be very deep.
Jason Lyle
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With my darkling
3 posted 2005-11-10 07:02 AM


innapropriate content?
Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2005-11-10 10:19 AM


This oozes with deep emotion, and can sense the pain in it.  Very well expressed Jason.
Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2005-11-10 01:25 PM


My guess this is about a child that is made to feel bad for merely existing...



Whether I am right or wrong..I liked it very much.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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