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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-11-07 08:15 AM



With sunset colors—
He blew out the candle—
With a fart

© Copyright 2005 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-11-07 04:31 PM


Hmmm.

I've heard of kids (usually boys) doing this sorta thing.

I've also heard that those who do stop at adulthood, or at least the onset of puberty.

(Hair being flammable and all...)

iliana
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2 posted 2005-11-08 01:34 AM


LOL.........at the senryu and at Serenity's comment..............heheheheh
Huan Yi
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3 posted 2005-11-08 01:44 AM


Iliana,

Thanks. . .

The critical attribute of a senryu
is it's comic character
reflecting on the frailties and foibles
of human being.

Yet like:

how long
forever
nineteen nineteen
of white dancers


Anonymous (senryu)

there is at least
one other  
more poignant way
of reading this.

Thanks again.

John




nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2005-11-08 05:49 AM


not what I expected~~~
*laughing*
M

LeeJ
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5 posted 2005-11-08 08:13 AM


says in no uncertain terms, that he screwed up, big time...


Enchantress
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Canada eh.
6 posted 2005-11-08 08:53 AM


Heh Heh...the first post I read this morning...
Thanks for starting my day with a smile!

Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again...and again...

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