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CalicoMemories
Junior Member

since 2004-08-31

Posts 15
the wind in the trees

0 posted 2005-09-29 04:30 PM

I wept
to the stone of
a thousands tears

September remains swollen
with early rain
the last taste of pure summer

I searched the fields
through tall grass
palms pressed
for the soft fire
of red flame
the core of heart

that remembers no smoke
no moving parts

he watches from a distance
and pretends this is
the easy walk

this journey of paradise
holds its true condolences

each tree is a memory
before the pages are
cut and turned

and tossed in the back attic
to collect dust
before the salt rises

to the surface
and their names are etched in stone

I am one person.
I am a chorus of a thousand souls.

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2005-09-29 05:51 PM

Very tender and poetic write....imagery was intriguing.

....jo

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

2 posted 2005-09-29 08:40 PM

sounds like you might be searching the things in life just out of reach ....

      seasons tend to do that to wandering souls ....

          a tender write ... TY

      CT

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

3 posted 2005-09-29 09:02 PM

I enjoy your style.

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

Sharksbean
Member

since 2005-09-25

Posts 368
jax

4 posted 2005-09-29 11:05 PM

this is very nice thank you for sharing

-may the force be with you in poetry

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2005-09-29 11:44 PM

The imagery has me tasting the acceptance of loss, of time's ability to soften the sharpest edges of pain.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2005-09-30 09:55 AM

Very beautiful imagery and depth of thought.

Love,
Margherita

Obsidian Snow
Member

since 2005-08-24

Posts 88

7 posted 2005-09-30 10:02 AM

progression of season very nicely displayed within your words.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2005-09-30 11:19 AM

Calico~
This is as lovely as I'll read this day~

'each tree is a memory
before the pages are
cut and turned'

Creatively unique ... I really like it~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

Email - noles1@totcon.com

CalicoMemories
Junior Member

since 2004-08-31

Posts 15
the wind in the trees

9 posted 2005-09-30 11:48 AM

Thank you for the wonderful comments.

cm

I am one person.
I am a chorus of a thousand souls.

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

10 posted 2005-10-01 04:08 AM

how would one feel if they found out a life they never allowed to live, was all a lie created by ones envy. or just one wanting to have control, and having no one hear truth. but that god, their is a god. a creator. i put all my faith in god. nice words. got me to think, sorry for rambling.

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