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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-08-08 07:41 AM


metal wheels
chewing marshmallows
the four twenty nine
amtraking animal cracker shapes
from the tagger's gun
slow shot jello colors

baby snott shimmer
and the security guard slumbers
unsocial security
never gets his man
but the can man does
with his back pack hijacks

and krylon rattles
through the alleys pretending
to be mountain sided
with some promised sun
on tiptoes skirt less
waiting for her turn to dance

and be a discovered monday


_______________

dark

scribblenote...4:29 freight going by..southbound..tagged up pretty by krylon colors
another so-cal monday

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (08-08-2005 09:13 AM).]

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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2005-08-08 07:50 AM


*wince*

It's just a brush burn.

(my fault actually, I should put on leathers before I read you)

Now order me a grand slam? I'm gonna go clean up a bit.

OH.

Two glasses of milk please....

grin

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
2 posted 2005-08-08 08:23 AM


thanks for the monday morning ride

missin the scribble note tho

Sunshine
Administrator
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2005-08-08 08:37 AM


and krylon rattles
through the alleys pretending
to be mountain sided
with some promised sun
on tiptoes skirt less
waiting for her turn to dance

and be a discovered ...

~*~

um-hmmmm...

and be.

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

4 posted 2005-08-08 09:15 AM


baby snott shimmer
and the security guard slumbers
unsocial security
never gets his man
but the can man does
with his back pack hijacks

Your minds optical sensors track trajectory with a digital mental fusion
Delivered to all who read


Pilgrimage
Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945
Texas, USA
5 posted 2005-08-08 09:47 AM


OH yeah, I love the krylon colors you paint with.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2005-08-08 11:55 AM


and krylon rattles
through the alleys pretending
to be mountain sided
with some promised sun
on tiptoes skirt less
waiting for her turn to dance

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

anyone ever tell ya that you rock?  

and?

only YOU could make this poetically perfect..


baby snott shimmer

yeah... you rock!

I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain
I don't mind helping you out ...
But I want you to remember my name

Alanis

Cloud 9
Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980
Ca
7 posted 2005-08-08 02:06 PM


lol
YES!! He does rock!! for sure.

[This message has been edited by Cloud 9 (08-08-2005 02:46 PM).]

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
8 posted 2005-08-08 02:14 PM


DS

I think I saw that very freight choo choo by my neck of the hood, some hours and minutes later.     

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