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Ruby Ramble-Little Girl Lost
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Ruby Ramble-Little Girl Lost |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. 
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It's worse than you may think- Inside the girl there was no prize Take it all away: Seek no refuge in my arms I am not the Wizard- Behind the curtain there was no one There's no place like here.. I'm lost now and my companion is asleep. Make a wish Please come again She closed her mind and saw the light Frantic game he rolls the dice.. Almost made it, pick a card Any card will never do.. You're too sad, I'm done with you. Ear to ear and flashy teeth.. How did you know I was so deep? Make up your mind It's much too late Leave the porch light on for Fate: He never came, and now she's mad Let it out and then we run Grief out ran her from behind The victor deserves cheap wine My cup overfloweth with expire Gather round the festive pyre Ring around the empty girl Inside her is the world.. We'll miss the train to Misery Quiet all the noisy jabber She fell off the wagon with such a clatter Broken now He took the key “Come on honey, take off with me.” Wander, wonder, leave a trail of crumbs .....No one thought to find her. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Such a vivid portrait of a forlorn state of mind. One can only sketch so well when the feelings run deep. Hugs Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
A very complex write Tinker. But there is a prize inside. I'm positive of that fact. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Enchantress A delight to read.  |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
interesting~ My spirit will rise |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Oh wow...that's emotional for me to read. Brilliant! Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ear to ear and flashy teeth.. How did you know I was so deep? Make up your mind It's much too late Leave the porch light on for Fate:  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The victor deserves cheap wine My cup overfloweth with expire Gather round the festive pyre Ring around the empty girl Inside her is the world.. We'll miss the train to Misery Quiet all the noisy jabber She fell off the wagon with such a clatter Broken now He took the key “Come on honey, take off with me.” Wander, wonder, leave a trail of crumbs .....No one thought to find her. ~*~ This struck old memories' wells... I think we need to duet soon...  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Enchantress~ Lady ... there is 'something' in this one that touches the tender fabric of me~ I don't know why I saw this - 'Make a wish Please come again' -as this ... Make a wish Please come true~ But ... I did~ Thank you for sharing the gentle sensitivity in this compelling read~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
enchantress, "Wander, wonder, leave a trail of crumbs" Could have copied the entire poem, but this really spoke to me! Thank you for sharing the little girl lost. It is mind boggling to me. One for the shelf, for sure. miscellanea |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Nancy - lots and lots of powerfully descriptive emotion here - will take several readings to get inside but it beckons one to feel all of it - very very well done - Paul |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Nancy: You breathe with gentle fire. TD |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Thank you all so very much dear friends. ~Hugs & Luv, Nancy~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was so sad, though, not for the girl, as she deems her gifts precious...(wink) but sad for those who were to self imposed to stop and take a look and listen...know the feeling well my poetess friend, but.... this part Seek no refuge in my arms I am not the Wizard- Behind the curtain there was no one and who said so, lady, you are a magician of words, life, sound, a wealth of success and more... |
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