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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2005-03-21 07:53 PM

Taut, the string of anxious wait
as a single heart chord strums
the willow’s limbs...as slumber
waits beyond the gate of passion.

Wise, the cry of a owl clinging to
tomorrow’s eve, warily watching
the darkened waters edge...

Lingering, a single droplet, born
of a tear, wavering slightly within
a breeze of kindled coal’s wash...
awaiting the curling wisp of steam
as an ember drinks voraciously of
a fatal flight.

When, might the timid soul step
lightly the moor in search the
teasing tug on fiery lips
and tender throat....following a
lover’s mountainous curve
before the shadow of a trilling sigh
is reborn.

Bare me, that I might unveil, hear
me that I might sing. Touch me, that
I might shiver....Gaze of me, that we
might smile again.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2005-03-21 08:10 PM

You are so lovely.

This is just so tender, Mag.

It reads as a whisper.

Mag...smile. For "magnificent!"

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2005-03-21 08:34 PM

"Bare me, that I might unveil, hear
me that I might sing. Touch me, that
I might shiver....Gaze of me, that we
might smile again."

Ahhhh...wonderful!!
Made me shiver.

Hugs, N.

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2005-03-21 08:40 PM

Magnus~

'When, might the timid soul step
lightly the moor in search the
teasing tug on fiery lips
and tender throat....following a
lover’s mountainous curve
before the shadow of a trilling sigh
is reborn.'

COULD have just printed the entire piece to show my favorite thoughts ... but then ... I'd continue *sighing* half the night~

This is stunningly 'warm'~
LOVE IT~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2005-03-21 08:56 PM

Very/Barry...all of this poem is so beautiful...I can't pick a favorite part....

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2005-03-22 12:09 PM

Beautiful poem Barry, the last verse made me melt.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2005-03-22 04:01 AM

Nice writing...James

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2005-03-22 05:11 AM

So very beautiful... but, oh... the ending... softly superb.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

8 posted 2005-03-22 08:54 AM

tender and lovely Barry

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2005-03-22 11:43 AM

whew

how romantic

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

10 posted 2005-03-22 11:53 AM

Bare me, that I might unveil, hear
me that I might sing. Touch me, that
I might shiver....Gaze of me, that we
might smile again''''

such a soft whisper and echo waiting for reply....beautiful

~~*~~
I'm Standing on a bridge
I'm waitin in the dark
I thought that you'd be here by now
Theres nothing but the rain
~~**~~

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

11 posted 2005-03-22 02:58 PM

Simply lovely - and the last stanza - soft sigh here -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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