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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2004-12-12 08:48 AM



there was no message there
in the bottle
only in movies
do the heros win

but the bottle was warm
in my hands
and the contents soothed
for the daydream hours

in neptune's back yard
where the horizon was worthy
as a women with long legs
and laughter colored clouds

I sipped to her        
and to the amber of her eyes
and wrote her a poem
on low tide parchment

tomorrow she will be as the wind


_________

Dark


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A Tone of Voice
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1 posted 2004-12-12 08:54 AM


gone like the wind
yet the memory lingers.....

lovely~

Atov~

Sunshine
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2 posted 2004-12-12 09:50 AM


in neptune's back yard
where the horizon was worthy
as a women with long legs
and laughter colored clouds

I sipped to her        
and to the amber of her eyes
and wrote her a poem
on low tide parchment

tomorrow she will be as the wind

~*~

What is nice about this?
Is that the wind always returns...

Beautiful, DS...simply beautiful.

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2004-12-12 09:56 AM


You do have a way with words! ~ and I read them slowly and savour them...


EA

nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2004-12-12 09:57 AM


Yes, very beautiful

M

Susan
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walking the surreal
5 posted 2004-12-12 12:19 PM


dreams are as the wind - stirring, yet fleeting - enjoyed this Dark one-

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2004-12-12 01:07 PM


atov, thanks for the review

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ms sunshine, yes it does seem to return
could spend hours there
watching the sails change shapes
thanks lady friend

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Earth Angel, humble thanks to you for your reviews


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MM's thanks hon for the smile


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ms susan...nothing is real unless you make it...thanks for the read ms

inkedgoddess
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7 posted 2004-12-13 07:39 PM


yep
but
always more to come

Suetang
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8 posted 2004-12-13 09:08 PM


Absolutely beautiful!  Fabulous imagery throughout this fine piece of writing.

Take care.........Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

*Alli4000*
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9 posted 2004-12-13 11:17 PM


Wow! Enjoyed this~

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

Janet Marie
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10 posted 2004-12-13 11:44 PM


and wrote her a poem
on low tide parchment

tomorrow she will be as the wind

====================================

*sigh*


*moth sigh*  

*Belabebeautiful*
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11 posted 2004-12-14 01:15 AM


I'm not sure what about this captured my attention so completely but I was enraptured...absolutly beautiful.
~Live and Laugh~

Don't look to me for perfection for I will surely let you down.
~Bella~

LeeJ
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12 posted 2004-12-14 07:49 AM


Hey DS Morning


A heartwarming story which is not only admirable, but caring enough to understand her and realize her....

Hugs

Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 2004-12-15 07:55 AM


dang DS, this one is simply beauty...
I love it when you write the beauty stuff.     
Good morning.

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