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Licking at Your Heels
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Licking at Your Heels |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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Mouth twisted with deceit Eyes speaking of betrayal Collecting pity you continue to speak Your interest seems to have changed What once was meaningless You now embrace With falseness that leaves me ill I know your dirty little secrets And know where you get your thrill Beware my darling I grow weary of this game You’re playing with fire And nothing is going to be the same Push me much more And the flames I breathe Will torch the eternal victim You have conceived "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
oh Susan...I KNOW this all to well....and the feeling of being pushed and spitting fire....you have captured this perfectly girl...HUGS you... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Susan, I know how this feels, yes, the anger and hurt but maybe it's worth another chance, what do you have to lose? I have learned forgiveness, a hard lesson...a second chance...or third or fourth or hundredth... *hugging you* |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Donna.  and Dixie, thanks for the "understanding" however, you have no clue what is really going on or you wouldn't even suggest I give him another chance...remember, Dixie, some people are very good actors. oh and, as for what do I have to lose? Me. That's what... I don't want to end up like others I have seen..miserable, hateful, dramatic, and attention seeking. I would rather be alone. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I understand where you are coming from...*sigh* |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
 ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this burns... love it a great write Susan. Mxx  into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Susan, I don't know what to say, because I really haven't walked in your shoes. Therefore, I don't know exactly what YOU are going through. I will say that I understand your replies. Hugs, Sweetie  Ethel |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
this is lethal......you've done the job here |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This is wrought with emotion and one can feel the burn - well expressed - and I hope for you a cool rain of cleansing followed by warm rays of joy - SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
You all are wonderful, thank you for the very kind replies.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...this is powerful! Eric |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Beware my darling I grow weary of this game You’re playing with fire And nothing is going to be the same Push me much more And the flames I breathe Will torch the eternal victim You have conceived ========================== Hell hath no fury.... whew ... yayayaya  POW-erful. your pen packs a punch Susan-girlie... but me thinks you dont hit like a girl. LOL |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Ericc. and JM? LOL....just a vent, I wouldn't really hurt anyone...  but thank you. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow Susan...good vent. I hope you are doing ok... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I like the positive of where you channel this emotion Susan. Not easy drawing the lines that need to be there. Packed with truth, and honorable power. Hugs, TD |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Attitude superb!!!! No question as to where you are at when it comes to this. Honest and straight to the point. I guess this person would have no recourse in claiming lack of warning. A very good emotional piece and I would hope you feel better after that venting. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
once trust is broken, things never seem to flower but sadly sink into some dark haven of destruction.... I like your vigulance and fidelity to self, not to compromise to someone who find no value in your friendship/relationship...His loss! |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I don't enjoy the pain behind this type of write but I do enjoy to read them.... I have many but I am chicken to post LOL |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Many find within such pain They live to love once more again. But there's no peace within your moan. 'Tis true sometimes we're best alone. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you everyone for the support.. and Ken? thank you for those words... "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Susan!!! You tell it like it is girl! Heart hugs. ~ Let peace begin with me... ~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Susan, after reading this...you and Dixie should do a duet...probably half of the male poets will haiku outta here!!! (He puts on his track shoes, kevlar vest and asbestos undies)... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Barry *hugs* your timing is superb! lol I would love nothing more than to do a duet with Dixie.. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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