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Krawdad
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0 posted 2004-11-09 01:12 AM



                  day 244


                  I have awakened in you
                  in your indelible ink
                  and you have stained
                  a vivid tattoo

                  but I need to see
                  your eyes smiling
                  to know what we know
                  and what we do not

                  Once in awhile
                  I am without the fear
                  alone along
                  a highway somewhere

                  If I look for you
                  in my darkening mirror
                  what image will I see
                  haunting me there





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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
1 posted 2004-11-09 05:12 AM


The first verse alone is genius.
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2 posted 2004-11-09 09:15 AM


now this sir... has the haunting quality one finds in something that they visit time and time again...

well done.. wish I had written this... this truly is good...

LeeJ
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3 posted 2004-11-09 09:17 AM


she will be as beautiful as you see her with open arms and flowing hair...

Tremendous read....enjoy your travels...

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-11-09 10:51 AM


So very beautiful...this.
*soft smiles*

Now while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again..and again.

Martie
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California
5 posted 2004-11-09 10:58 AM


Krawdad

I've been reading this series of yours..sorry for not replying to all of them.  This one is very touching...they all are.  

myheart
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lost in your eyes
6 posted 2004-11-09 11:05 AM


intriguing & wonderful.    ~myheart~

Love is the poetry of the senses.  ~HonorĂ© de Balzac

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2004-11-09 01:51 PM


Krawdad
LOL the image in your mind, enjoyed.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
8 posted 2004-11-09 01:55 PM


I can see it all now ~ and feel it...


EA

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon
9 posted 2004-11-09 09:51 PM


I have awakened in you
in your indelible ink
and you have stained
a vivid tattoo



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