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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-10-31 02:16 PM


Dancing on a jeweller's window man ain't got no rap
Stealing all, taking you, ain't got no rap
Living on the edge
Cause my parents
Got their edge
Living on the rap

Ain't not self cruise
Missiles not my business honey
Life's my business honey
And I ain't crusing
In my boat
Cos the hard boards full of my float
Cruising

Big smell of the sea for me
Yea
On the feet, beat, mouth, deceit, power, blower, aching, stower, them feet for me
and slowly I
Hey man you alive, got a deal 9 to 5, over 50 where you been, age, your passed it, just beging

And tell the world
that we consider people past the age of 50 - had it

But we are always led
By our leaders

Dave


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the_loner_23
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1 posted 2004-10-31 05:05 PM


Interesting poem. But enjoyed the read.

Cold hands means a warm heart

passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-10-31 08:52 PM


powerful ending!
DavePage
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3 posted 2004-11-01 01:04 PM


Thanks

I was trying at my rap protest stuff.

I'm afraid for me rap is parallel thinking without realising that most of the world is sequential thinking.

Hammer it with a good beat and you arn't thinking of rap unless it is around a rug.

Dave

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