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SEA
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with you

0 posted 2004-09-02 12:00 PM






Take me down
to a moonlit river’s view
wade me in the depths
swirl me
in the heart of you

~*~

soak me in serenity
drench my soul
with love confide
bathe me in emotions
you’ve kept hidden inside

~*~

saturate my senses,
immerse me in touch
that is you
ripple me in dreams
then make them come true

~*~


~SEA~


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Canada eh.
1 posted 2004-09-02 12:04 PM


Oh my how beautiful this is Susan!!
So good to be home and read you once again.
~Smiles & Hugs~

~ Summer can't be over...
I still have sand in my shoes. ~

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2 posted 2004-09-02 12:18 PM


this is so pretty
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3 posted 2004-09-02 12:22 PM


SEA~
This is delicately GORGEOUS~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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4 posted 2004-09-02 12:26 PM


oh yes!

I love this!

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2004-09-02 05:52 PM


Lovely...James
Susan
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6 posted 2004-09-02 07:46 PM


Beautifully romantic- swirl me - yes, love it.

Susan

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7 posted 2004-09-02 08:27 PM


then make them come true


yes~~

M

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
8 posted 2004-09-02 08:32 PM


Ripple away...
E S West
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9 posted 2004-09-03 04:58 PM


What can one say of these words?... WOW!

   Beautiful work.....  E S West

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10 posted 2004-09-03 09:51 PM


Susan,
I like that I can count on a delightful experience when I open your threads. And such enticing pictures to spur your delicate writing. You rock!

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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11 posted 2004-09-04 03:55 PM


Susan, I loved this!  It is so romantic.... so passionate!   ....jo
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12 posted 2004-09-06 01:15 PM


Such gentle ripples you leave behind.

Enjoyed the swirl, very much.


Hugs, SEAgal~


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13 posted 2004-09-23 10:32 PM


One more time...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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Floating gently on a cloud....
14 posted 2004-12-01 04:11 AM


Oooh nice one...to me it felt like a river: slow and lazy to begin with and then gathering momemtum with the imperatives as though it were approaching a falls, flying over the falls and once at the bottom comes the calm after the stormy water, with the gently rippling last two lines.
But then, I am kinda loony.
*hug*, Lizzie.

"Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake

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