A Stream Runs Here and I Shall Wait ( JM's Prayer)

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Cpat Hair

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0 posted 2004-08-10 06:53 PM

Two feet shod in canvas
grace bare legs below
ankles adorned with beads
reminding me
the color of the earth can change
and that water itself both caries and reflects
all that it flows through

I plant them
   in currents
and let her carry away the grain of me
  as she does the stone
              as she does the earth itself
when in flood she scours across
the ache of too much
only later to cry
Too little…
then                             [{not enough}]

Even here in this the small of her
I feel the silt she carries begin to settle
planting me deeper in her bed
   perhaps
if I stand long enough
I too will become
                            raging still

hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA

1 posted 2004-08-10 06:55 PM

Cpat...this poem is magnificent in its imagery...wonderful write

Martie

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2 posted 2004-08-10 06:58 PM

Ron

I think this will make her cry a river...yep! You are a wonder!

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

3 posted 2004-08-10 07:02 PM

Oh gads...do this again! The last lines were superb! That's exactly how a river runs....

Janet Marie
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4 posted 2004-08-10 07:06 PM

reminding me
the color of the earth can change
and that water itself both caries and reflects
all that it flows through

I plant them
   in currents
and let her carry away the grain of me
  as she does the stone
              as she does the earth itself
=============================

yep...Martie knows me well...crying a mothy river here...( moths love a good poetry cry) but rest assured...i can still see to click me library button...

thank you Ron... very very much....
someday were gonna fish on one of these midwest rivers...and I'll bait your hook.

thank you my friend.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

5 posted 2004-08-10 07:09 PM

I'll help her bait that hook.
? What am I saying, I don't even know how to bait a hook!

Martie

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6 posted 2004-08-10 07:20 PM

I love baiting hooks...and clicking the darn library button too!

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2004-08-10 08:02 PM

I have such wonderful taste in poets and friends, even if I do say so myself...

this belongs with the other...so, up you go!

yer gawgeous

and *ahem*

my reminder for others:
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Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2004-08-10 10:40 PM

amazing! in all aspects!

JM....

a wonder here!

I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me
I've been alone all along..Now I'm bound by the life you left behind

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

9 posted 2004-08-10 11:43 PM

Excellent write Captain!!
One for the library.
Thank you sir.

~ Those who complain the sun has gone out of their world
....have obviously never danced in the rain ~

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

10 posted 2004-08-11 03:39 AM

"Even here in this the small of her
I feel the silt she carries begin to settle
planting me deeper in her bed
   perhaps
if I stand long enough
I too will become
                            raging still"

Awesome and inspired!  Clicking library (which is what I do for most of yours, Cpat!)

....jo

passing shadows
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displaced

11 posted 2004-08-11 04:44 AM

bravo!

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2004-08-11 05:02 AM

Captain, I too was moved by that image of her feet in the water. It was a pleasure to read your eloquent poetic response to that photo.

"if I stand long enough
I too will become
raging still"

~ Your still waters run very deep...

EA

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

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13 posted 2004-08-11 06:29 AM

sighs...how absolutely beautiful...such tender awareness of her...

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

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14 posted 2004-08-11 10:51 AM

wonderful....just wonderful...

Mysteria

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British Columbia, Canada

15 posted 2004-08-11 12:23 PM

Good grief,and a wow for good measure!

See Ron, you knocked her socks off

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

16 posted 2004-08-12 07:59 PM

Nice writing...James

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