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James_A_Fraser
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Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2004-07-21 08:25 PM



slowly, slowly this wheel turns,
bound to a slower wheel
bound to a slower
to a slower
a slower
slower
and
I
will
wait
for you
until then
when all the
wheels of time
have aligned for us
and we will be together
unbound and lovers once again


© Copyright 2004 James A. Fraser - All Rights Reserved
EagleScorpion
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Here, Now, Forever
1 posted 2004-07-21 08:36 PM


cool!!


Martie
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2 posted 2004-07-21 08:37 PM


Jamie

Time is like that, it seems...rolling with or against.  Wonderful form to this and such poignant thoughts.  

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with you
3 posted 2004-07-21 09:14 PM


"I
will
wait
for you
until then
when all the
wheels of time
have aligned for us
and we will be together
unbound and lovers once again"


I loved this

marcel
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az, usa
4 posted 2004-07-21 09:15 PM


what a cool and creative piece, simply awsome!
yv
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5 posted 2004-07-21 09:23 PM


Forget about the ingenious way in which you made it possible for your poem to make sense and your formation to be beautiful; the words were gorgeous.  Simple.  Short.  Meaningful.  I loved it.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2004-07-21 09:32 PM



The wheels turn...
the clock ticks,
the sand streams...

Excellent

GG
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Lost in thought
7 posted 2004-07-21 09:35 PM


Creative, thoughtful, and beautiful...
this is one that will stick in the mind long after reading.
Love it

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
                  Joyce kilmer

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8 posted 2004-07-29 02:40 PM


What a creative presentation... how tender and beautiful this anticipation of reunion. *S* A love so cherished and yearned for is to be envied. *S*
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