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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-07-14 11:38 PM

It rained today;

the sky designed
for thirsty eyes
in tapping rhymes
3/4 time,

from windowed views,
it poured the news
the moonstruck girl,
she cried the blues,

it rained today;

in dotted ii's and
crisscrossed lines
for lovestarved eyes
illusion's wine,

connecting dots
forget me nots
reprieve of darkness
as hearts unblock,

from deep seclusion
embraced inclusion
alas, such transience
in the drops dilution

wornways
Member

since 2001-10-18

Posts 204
CA, USA

1 posted 2004-07-14 11:45 PM

creative little piece of writing.

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I no longer ask who I am, or even what I am. It has dawned on me that there are no answers to such questions, except for our feeble-minded notions.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2004-07-15 12:14 PM

Blowing my bangs off my forehead and breathing a long winded sigh.

Beautifully said and done, Michele.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

3 posted 2004-07-15 12:31 PM

Hi Michele. I love the way you wrote this.
I liked the rhythm and rhyme.
Hugs,
Ethel

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2004-07-15 10:31 AM

"from windowed views,
it poured the news
the moonstruck girl,
she cried the blues"

I loved the rhythm.

Don't know how long you have had this new pic up (I was out of town) but it seemed to bring home the meaning behind the words...

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2004-07-15 11:03 AM

A song....

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-07-15 11:15 AM

Michele, this could be put to music..
the rhythm is beautiful.
Well done.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

7 posted 2004-07-15 11:28 AM

This is an absolute beauty! The tempo was 3-quarter time too. Really enjoyed this one!

JL

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

8 posted 2004-07-15 11:44 AM

your words flow like a spell...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2004-07-15 12:26 PM

put together nicely

love that ending

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

10 posted 2004-07-15 12:29 PM

Michele, you sure tap out wonderful poems -- I loved this one.

....jo

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

11 posted 2004-07-15 06:08 PM

you still rock

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

12 posted 2004-07-15 06:15 PM

thanks for seeking him with me

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