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Juju
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In your dreams

0 posted 2004-07-11 08:18 PM


Trapt are the Fallen

Running from all of they're fears,
falling in to temptation,
Crawling crippled on their knees.

Wearing makeup that hides years,
Fealing inner mutaTION,
Crying under appletrees.

Relying on the wrong peers,
Leaving all expectation,
Blaming stings on bumble bees.

fighting all their falling tears,
waiting at the train station,
Denying all that SHOULD be.

Looking all the way back to who they use to be:
Finding all out that now, they can never be free.


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Ok so I over did the alls and the ings, but I think its worked out to were it works with the poem.

lots of love

Juju


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Susan
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1 posted 2004-07-11 09:40 PM


I think it works.  I wonder, though, who the fallen are in your mind?  Mine can bring up so many possibilities.  Very interesting, this.  Let's hope that redemption is available to all.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Juju
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2 posted 2004-07-11 10:59 PM


I supose I should of been less braod, yet I wasn't at the same time. I hinteds who I was talking about. Mostly poeple of crime. It always seems they are trapt in to that life. Not wanting to conform, yet regret what they could of been. Sometimes I wonder if purgitory is just what could you have done to better the world you live in or be in the place of all of the people you have hurt. I could go on and on I supose...


Juju

iliana
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3 posted 2004-07-12 12:01 PM


You have some really good things going on here, Juju.  Enjoyed!
Juju
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4 posted 2004-07-12 12:36 PM


Thank you.

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