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marcel
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0 posted 2004-07-11 09:55 PM



When my eyes loved you that first glimpse
I had to have you in my life.
My heart told me you would be the one,
To rescue me from the shores of loneliness---
A far, far away place that sorrow has cast me;
My longing has set a reflective mood on the ocean
And I walked across its sunset beams to test reality;
But could God be so cruel to play a magician
And trick my eyes as would an illusionist?
For the sake of hope and happiness,
Let me inhale the fragrance of your essence
To release my soul from the bonds of doubt;
Let me kiss your soft lips and hands
To give me a taste of what Heaven should be;
Let your eyes, blurry with tears open up
So I can wipe away loneliness from your lovely face;
Let me strengthen your fragile heart with my love,
To prove to you that I am real.

Marcel

© Copyright 2004 keith marcel - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2004-07-11 10:49 PM


These words reach far deeper than you may ever realize.
Magnificent in sentiment and totality.
Very real.
TD

Paper Tiger
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2 posted 2004-07-12 01:20 AM


I like this.  It has good structure, feeling, emotion, and it's complex and deep.

We see much, observe little, and perceive less.

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4 posted 2004-07-12 08:52 AM


sigh
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5 posted 2004-07-12 01:08 PM


Marcel~

'When my eyes loved you that first glimpse
I had to have you in my life'


*sighs* this lady~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Susan
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6 posted 2004-07-12 02:49 PM


Mmmm, very nice.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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7 posted 2004-07-12 06:37 PM


quote:
My longing has set a reflective mood on the ocean.
And I walked across its sunset beams to test reality


ThisDiamond
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8 posted 2004-07-13 10:32 PM


A definite encore required.
Enjoyed as much the second time around.
TD

iliana
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9 posted 2004-07-13 11:12 PM


Beautiful, marcel.....so tender.
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