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Heart Talons (Guess Who I Am)
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Heart Talons (Guess Who I Am) |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
A mournful wale starting from your gut down low. Racking sobs that won’t stop, wont let go. You can sense my presence begin feeling my snake like advancement upon your heart and soul. You seek a place to hide but there’s no where to go. Feel the darkness winning as I wrap my talons around your heart your tears a shield,....but no matter your soul, spirit, and mind try to depart. . I grab you back with a squeeze and a shake upon your spirit, vengeance I do take. With slow agonizing pain your a mouse to be devoured, I’m the snake. Extending my talons slicing open your soul. clearing your mind exposed open wounds untold. I’m what you fear the most with dreams and happiness laid aside. I can make the living feel like they’ve died. Cry as you might with head in hands to the injustice with nowhere to flee. My claws grasp every part of your body with it’s malicious intentions in reverie. Despair isn’t around the corner tonight it has arrived. All dreams put to dust knowing it’s within you I reside. My name to you is a missed lovers kiss. My name to you is Loneliness. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I had fun actually....reading this. What a way to write it...like a game. Great concept...very descriptive writing. Yet such a horrible thing to be,... to feel. Take my hand  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I have read this probably 10 times so far. Each time I feel something stronger, something deeper. I believe this is the deepest piece you've ever written. Kathleen indy31_99@yahoo.com |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
AHHHHCK!! This is so terrible and sinister,i love it!! I like the part making the living feel like they've died.....that describes alot of us..cosmic people...this is an outstanding poem!! swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Thank you Spit, I'm glad you had fun, haha It was fun writing it. haha Rose yes you may be right. and thank you. Swamp, yes it sinister. hahaha Thanks . Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Joel~ Yes you have described loss well, whether it be through death or love that has gone, that loss becomes a dreadful lonliness that devours us Well written Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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sgreybe Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 209London, UK |
Joel Wow! What an awesome poem! It so spoke to me; I've been there, but have never seen or heard it so vividly put. Thanks my friend. Sylvia |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Lonliness couldn't be described in the way you have expressed it here again. Good work Joel. |
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Evilkat88 Junior Member
since 2000-05-01
Posts 37 |
Yet agin I love one of you're poem's I have felt the same before and I couldn't put it in to words. But you have and thank you for that. Cuase sometimes we can't come up with the words on are own and need someone to do it for us. Blessed Be Kat |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Joel....sadly I relate to this very well. Great writing!! You are indeed a deep and powerful man. What strength!! Listen tonight for the howl of the lonely wolf....just for you. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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