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Busy with my own cheek and thunder

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Martie
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Doves give me joy
the silly simple songs of them

until

busy with my own cheek and thunder

cages thought to protect    now starve
and thereís innocence in trying to escape
into the wild air
to nourish
or to die

Is there an order to importance

Distress flies around me
and touches my shoulder with a sharp claw
until I focus and bleed enough to see

I love birds

They have forgotten

Forgiven the hunger now itís filled
they say this with their steady red eyes

and I wonder
how many cages I have made
and then neglected with my own cheek and blunder
© Copyright 2004 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 07-02-2004 04:47 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Such a sad sound to this...
but they will forgive...

I do know the feel of this, however,
as we left for six days,
and my squirrels and rabbits all lost weight...

do we hinder, feeding nature?

or simply strive to be part of a more peaceful order?

ah sweetie...
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ah yes!

A wise one you are...and lawdy lawdy that title? laughing now

check your e mail in a few, k?

Hugs, wise poet woman.
James_A_Fraser
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3 posted 07-02-2004 04:50 PM       View Profile for James_A_Fraser   Email James_A_Fraser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for James_A_Fraser

None, now.... at least none that I can see.

Watching you work is a joy to me, because I know I am watching poetry write itself. Thank you for the privilege, dear lady.



~~J

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Martie
A delight to read.
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5 posted 07-02-2004 05:31 PM       View Profile for icebox   Email icebox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for icebox

The creatures forgive.

Much growth here, Grasshopper.

*smile*
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Delightful,  Martie!!!!
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Oh, yes......
Enjoyed.......jo
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Ah the creatures give unconditional love sweet Martie...
they forgive easily.
Excellent write.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

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Martie,  this is yet another of your poetry
that crosses a couple of lines of meaning
in my perception.  Excellent as always.  
Hoping you are well..
Duncan
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"I love birds

They have forgotten

Forgiven the hunger now itís filled
they say this with their steady red eyes"

Perhaps it's a matter of neccesity, the forgetting.  How else would they continue to sing?  
Sometimes, your writing is so raw, Martie, that the sensation of it nearly burns.  This is one of those times...
  
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This speaks volumes, Martie...

and I hear you...

Love you, my friend...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

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12 posted 07-02-2004 11:28 PM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

I agree with Magnus, there is more than one way to read this.  Excellent.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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I love birds too, except at 6 in the morning when they are singing at my window and I've just laid down at 4
Janet Marie
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and I wonder
how many cages I have made
and then neglected with my own cheek and blunder
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oh my....you write mirrors on my heart...

how timely this piece is to me....

my blunders came in the way of furry friends
rather than feathers...but the reality is heart breaking never the less.

I understand this write and feel every word...Ive learned another lesson the hard way.
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Martie - how well you write that no matter what has taken over our lives and no matter how weighty or important there are others things and beings dependent on us...not all of us can so truthfully remark on our experiences as you do - thanks helps me remember there are lots of things I must be a part of even if something else seems to be claiming my time - so very well done - Paul
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Self regret is the most puzzling of emotions, especially when the occasion for reparation is past.  This is a beautiful story.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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17 posted 07-03-2004 04:34 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Your first lines touched me immediately... for a pair of doves has been using one of my hanging baskets as a nest for many years... if it isn't the same pair, word got around where the softie lives. *G* I've enjoyed both their cooing and their bickering... and the wobbly first flights of their offspring... but one was dead on my patio earlier this week... apparently attacked by a crow.

Whatever the cages or neglect... love is an endless fount of forgiveness... and as long as there is life, amends are possible. *S*

Beautiful, thoughtful write!
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Oh Gosh, you're brilliant Martie.

it's a keeper.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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19 posted 07-06-2004 11:19 AM       View Profile for jellybeans   Email jellybeans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jellybeans

ah but there is a price for freedom as well...we had a dove once, that we were taking care of until it could fly again, and I hated for it to be caged, so we let it roam the beams of the porch...until one morning when all we found was a few stray feathers...
cats...sigh...the sky is made for those that fly...we... can only dream..
nice write martie
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Enjoyed

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