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1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-04-29 07:40 PM



I have nothing to offer you?


you words sting like salt on sunburn
and you miss my worth by oceans
this is the woman that I am clearly

I am no sleeping beauty
wide awake and ready
my face launches nothing
but my heart dreams
the breath of pillowed
caresses sweet wish
arms that are tired
but can still hold the future
a gentle butterfly prayer
that voids loneliness
the hand press of friendship
to never depart
a promising ear
to address emptiness
truthful tongue to lick
the wounds of every hurt
missed lust’s ache spilled
lost in desire’s spell
strong shoulders that carry
the risk of unknown
a soul that drips in elixir
of tenderness and tears
paint that eyes see
and holds tighter than brush
the voice of the verse
not written till now
I am not so undeserving
substance makes me a reward



© Copyright 2004 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
INclan
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since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024
Indiana, USA
1 posted 2004-04-29 07:46 PM


If true that, out of the overflow of the heart the mouth speaks....this person posesses a beauty seldom seen.  I enjoyed both the subject matter and the method of construction.  Well done.

INclan

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada
2 posted 2004-04-29 07:50 PM


Much is offered in the words you pen. This poem is filled with heart...Wonderful writing...

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Saluting with misty eyes
3 posted 2004-04-29 08:35 PM


This is definately one of the best things I've read on here in several days... You are supremely talentd, and are able to evoke emotions in your reader like few can.
Gorgeous write.

I AM smiling...
And tht fact should be enough to cause you to worry.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
4 posted 2004-04-30 02:32 AM


well what is he looking for? Tell him to take a long walk off a short pier and maybe he'll find buried treasure...

what a dip! he's got you right in front of his face...men aren't real smart creatures, are they?

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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Florida
5 posted 2004-04-30 09:12 AM


Helen~

What can one say?  You said it all and very well!

Bravo.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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